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Tue 20 Oct, 2009 08:05 am
I wrote an article introducing each member of my family, and I employed t "My family is a family of four" as the first sentence. My teacher, however, asked me to revise it and make it more concise. I was just wondering if this sentence can be improved from the perspective of English writing.
@Adverb,
"My family has four members."
"There are four people in my family."
My critique of "My family is a family of four" is that the repetition of the word "family" makes it sound awkward. I like the alliteration, though.
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