Please correct this complex sentence if it is wrong.

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Dear All,

Please correct this complex sentence if it is wrong.

The day when you do all the things which were predefined by you, are perfectly , Onthat day you should be very happy . If you make all the days like this then you will be the best.

Regards

Madhu

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@mcadhu,

That's two sentences.

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The day when you do all the things which were predefined by you, are perfectly , Onthat day you should be very happy .

The phrase "are perfectly" makes no sense. The word "predefined" is awkward and ambiguous. The word "On" should not be capitalized--the only words which one capitalizes in English, other than the initial word of a sentence, are proper nouns, and some titles (there is a difference of opinion about English usage regarding titles). This, perhaps, is what you mean to say:

The day when you do all the things you wanted to accomplish--and do them perfectly--on that day you should be very happy.

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@mcadhu,

mcadhu wrote:

Dear All,

Please correct this complex sentence if it is wrong.

The day when you do all the things which were predefined by you, are perfectly , Onthat day you should be very happy . If you make all the days like this then you will be the best.

Regards

Madhu

English has rules; however, some people subscribe to them, some do not. For example, the word "that" should refer to people, instead of "which." Just my best effort. No guarantees it will be considered the correct answer:

The day when you do all the things, that were predefined by you, and are perfectly done, on that day you should be very happy; if you make all the days like this, then you will be at your best.

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@Foofie,

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English has rules; however, some people subscribe to them, some do not.

English does indeed have rules, Foofie, but they aren't the simplistic nonsense that you were taught in school. Those were prescriptions and they have little to nothing to do with English.

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For example, the word "that" should refer to people, instead of "which."

'which' is sometimes used to refer to people as a group in a general rather than a specific sense.

However, in this situation the referent isn't to any person.

"The day when you do all the things which were predefined by you, ..."

'which' refers to 'things'. You can see this by replacing the pronoun which 'which' replaces.

The day when you do all the things. They [which] were predefined by you,

?? The day when you do all the things. You [which] were predefined by you, ??

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@Setanta,

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The word "On" should not be capitalized--the only words which one capitalizes in English, other than the initial word of a sentence, are proper nouns, and some titles (there is a difference of opinion about English usage regarding titles).

Don't forget the pronoun I, Set.

I suspect that when, and if Madhu chooses a more appropriate verb phrase than "are perfectly", [could be Mother tongue interference, ie. a direct translation, which would make sense in Madhu's language], we might find that 'on' was starting a new sentence. There's not much difference between a comma and a period on a keyboard.

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