It will be less time-consuming for me to simply correct the errors.
That is what I'm used to expect, Roberta! Because I always worry about that my request will cost you too much time. And now, it is a relief for me to hear you say so.
(1) Got should be GotTEN
Originally, I did want to use "gotten" instead of "got", but AHD indicates: Got: Past tense and a past participle of get. I thought "got" looks somewhat terse than "gotten", so I decided to use "got".
(2) "BEEN" instead of "spent"
Cool! Very accurate!
In addition, putting "Since September 6" in the front of the sentence is more suitable for English writing custom. Yes!
(3) Adding SUSPENDED
Clearer! It seems that I have had a vague presentiment about "in the air" is not enough to depict accurately the situation. Now you've corrected me , thanks.
(4) SurprisINGLY instead of Surprised
If I used "Surprisedly", would it work well?
(5) Okay, figure is redundant; and "thinNER" has been to the point.
(6) "HAVE BEGUN" instead of "begin"
A stronger expression!
(7) "That" instead of "if"
(8) HIGH-PROTEIN liquid
(9) IT IS common sense TO ASSUME, THAT ONLY
Sorry, I have not gotten the correction now. (Mind hesitating ... I will try to find some reasons to prove the expression "as a common sense" works...)
(10) AND NOT instead of "without"
It seems I don't know how to use "without" properly.
A side note: if a correction that I don't comment on it here, that means I've accepted the correction.
(11) ORISTAR--WHAT DOES HEAVILY FRESHED MEAN?
See AHD the term "meaty (8)": Heavily fleshed. It approx equals "full of meat".
(12) AND his face DOES NOT APPEAR THINNER THAN IT WAS BEFORE THE STUNT BEGAN. IT SHOULD BE NOTED, though, THAT his eye sockets HAVE darkened.
(13) SPECTATORS' instead of Audience
YES! More accurate!
(14) What a SNEAKING!
(15) SPONSORED may be better, I guess.
(16) STATES firmly instead of "declares firmly"
Yeah, I don't know to use "declare" properly.
(17) (O--IS THE EXCLAMATION POINT PART OF THE QUOTE? IF IT IS, THEN IT'S IN THE RIGHT PLACE.)
Do you mean "IS THE EXCLAMATION POINTing PART OF THE QUOTE?"
What I meant is "He(Blaine) just drinks water! = Blaine just drinks water!"
(18) A British health expert SUSPECTS that David Blaine has HAD ACCESS TO HIGH-PROTEIN LIQUID FOODS.
The rewriting is very good. It seems the thing Blaine is doing cannot be "reasoned out", just can be "suspected", cos we don't actually catch out the evidence that he is really doing foul play.
(19) BTW, this was quite long. I don't know whether I'll be able to respond to such long questions in the future. (I'm getting busy with work.) I'll try to help as best I can.
Please Just feel free to help me out! However, never have I tried to drag someone from her/his work to give me a hand.Because God will help me
. Frankly, I will write longer message or article to seek help here. But if you would like to analyze some paragraphs of my writing, I will be grateful.
Thanks for correcting.