No Expert
spendius wrote:The length of sentences in English, and I don't know anything worth a blow about other languages, is a function of the intelligence of the composer of them and his penchant for taking the piss out of his fellow man.
That is a sentence which is a fair way above 14.3 words and which would make no sense if any one word was omitted in order to make understanding more efficient.
A more concise way of expressing it (with considerably fewer words):
The length of sentences in English is a function of the composer's intelligence and his penchant for taking the piss out of his fellow man.
In actual fact I myself, and I'm no expert, have written many a sentence on the ID thread which far surpasses 14.3 words and all of them, as far as I could make it possible, were clear and concise expressions of the ideas I was attempting to convey at the time they were written and if anyone had any difficulties with the comprehension of them they should seek the explanation within the parameters of their own limitations and cease claiming that they were incomprehensible as a fact on the basis that their own attention span had been stunted by exposure to too much incoherence, drivel and outright bullshit.[/quote]
Where to begin?
Extraneous words adding nothing to the meaning "In actual fact, I myself" - could be replaced with the single word I.
Run-on sentence - everything from the word if (if anyone had....) is a separate thought and should be expressed as a separate sentence.
Misplaced modifiers, passive voice, etc.
Throw it all out, you didn't "take the piss out" of this particular fellow man.
Here's what you were attempting to say, in a more concise and comprehensible format.
Although no expert, many of my sentences on the ID thread far surpassed 14.3 words and all of them, as far as I could make it possible, were clear and concise expressions of the ideas I was attempting to convey at the time I wrote them. If anyone has difficulties comprehending them, instead of claiming the sentences are incomprehensible, he should seek an explanation of his attention span's failure within the parameters of his own limitations and within his over exposure to incoherence, drivel, and outright bullshit.
The sentence lengths are each over 40 words, with average word lengths approaching five characters. The reading grade level according to Flesch-Kincaid's formula would be about 20.5 - higher than most American educated people would be comfortable reading. However, I would wager that if you gave a target audience copies of both your and my sentences, I would have a much larger percentage of people who understood them.