Quote:Should I use 'hope' instead of 'wish'?
1. I would use 'hope'. "Wish" is most commonly used in hypothetical (or imagined) situations, while 'hope' can be used to specify a desired outcome.
2. You ask, "Are there any errors in the above sentences?", but it is in fact only one (very long) sentence. I would rectify that in the following fashion:
Going on tozan to Japan to pray to the Dai-Gohonzon in the Head Temple can bring us such great benefits. I hope all the believers of our temple in Singapore will try their best to go to the Head Temple to have an audience with the Dai-Gohonzon.