Please help me complete this English Love Poem

Goodnight, all. I had hoped that this would be a more serious approach for out Arthur, but I guess it takes all kinds.

What? THAT'S LOVE!

Eeesh. Fine, I'll do another up in a bit.

Re: Please help me complete this English Love Poem
I'll give you
My eyes for they were ever only for you
My nose which holds you in memory
My lips that shall utter my love for you
My shoulders on which you may grieve

I'll give you
My arms that shall circle you time and again
My hands that intimately yours have known
My legs which will bear us both through the rain
My feet that shall ever walk by your own.


Better Letty? (I'm trying!)

I'll give you
My eyes to see you lovingly,
My nose to smell your sweet perfume,
My lips to kiss you tenderly,
My shoulders to shield you from gloom.

I'll give you
My arms to hold you evermore,
My hands to hold your hand in mine,
My legs to take me to your core,
My feet to walk with you benign.


I'll give you my heart if yours ever dismays,
I'll give you my soul so we'll always be one,
I'll give you my love until the end of days,
I'll give you my life 'till even that is done.


Bittersweet. Ah, unconditional love is such a beautiful thing...

I know our Arthur appreciates them all, and I am glad that I could help. It was fun for me as well, because it has been difficult for me to create since Cavfancier died.

Thanx Letty for your effort. I was so thrilled to read all of them.

No worries about my "Brat Brigade". They are actually all adults. I'm teacher trainer. So my students are all teachers of the Brat Brigade. Hehehe.

Let's invite more of different kinds and types.

Arthur

Lots of good poets on here, Arthur. Some are fantastic, as demonstrated
by the above creators.

Some nice poems here, and we are expecting your contribution
This is written by Sparkatas

I will give u ,
my words to write ur emotions ,
my tears to swim into ...
my smile to climb on ...
my breath to sing the song u like ,
my eyes to look in to my soul ,

and I will give u
my hands to support me ,
when i fall from the high in ur arms ,
i give u my legs to search my home ,
which i want to give u ...
and i give u my feets to stay in my heart !

i give u me ...
as i have nothing to give u anything !
just take myself from me ...
as i want to get lost in u
forever ,... forever !

Some nice poems here, and we are expecting your contribution
Spartakas again

I will give you my

Eyes to see the fortune smiling at u ,
Nose to smell the problems around u ,
Lips to kiss the babies without mothers on the street
Shoulders to give support to old ppls who gave their life
to support u and me ..

I will give you my
Arms to hug the sky around u ,
Hands to take the stars and flowers in them ,
Legs i give u to walk with everyone who doesnt have legs at all ......
Feet to just stand with someone ... who needs some one to stand with him or her !

Some nice poems here, and we are expecting your contribution
I will give you-by yours truly
Laydee

I'll give you
My eyes to tell you how much I love you,
My nose to smell your sweet fragrant hair,
My lips to show you how much I care,
And my shoulders if you are in despair.

I'll give you
My arms for you to embrace,
My hands for you to feel safe,
My legs so that we can walk together forever,
And my feet to catch up with you in the never.

I'll give you
A bouquet of red roses,
A carpet full of choices,
A heart for you to keep forever,
And a lifetime together.

i'm so happy to get so many beautiful poems
My friend Ningning wrote in Chinese and I did the translation for her as follows:

I'll give you my eyes to apperceive the love sealed deeply in my heart;

I'll give you my brains to recollect the dribs and drabs we tasted together in the past

I'll give you my heart to let you perceive the rhythm of my heart beating completely for you.

I'll give you my feet to consort with you tending towards the land of serenity and tranquility.

我将给你我的眼睛，让你看到我心深处深藏的爱意；
我将给你我的大脑，让你记忆我们曾经的点点滴滴；
我将给你我的心脏，让你感受她为你而跳动的节奏；
我将给你我的双脚，让他陪你一起走向你渴望的宁静之地

A home you made for me
A Home You Made For Me
I would give you my:
eyes to effulge in your light--my pupils, soul painfully dialate in the eternal vacuity of your contemptuous sight,
my eyes, soul are pushed back, to the recesses of my mind where i am turned
away from your love
and into the cold,
where in the blackness, i find the dimension of your imagination
--your fantasy, devoid of truth
my nose, whereby the slightest breath of fresh oxygen is choked from my living tissue, the last breath of my spirit
fumed as the stench of a malignant corpse, in your presence
lips,
to form slanderous utterances,
slighted and farced proportions of distasteful shape
wherein the word of your thought takes form
through my unwilling flesh,
I would give you:
my shoulders, to rub past, in a forlorn, harsh apathy
as such is your hidden pleasure
the sick thrill of helping to rob a human of his dignity
my arms, useless without the respect
to hail your divinity
and to embrace its spiritual opposite

hands to inscribe new meaning, conceived in lie
as they scrape along the bottom of your jagged dreamscape,
i yearn for the strength to once again own them, to possess them ,
to turn them upon myself, at least, and find my own throat
legs, to work for you in fear
(of myself)
while you fatten yourself with malcontented fancies

and feet, sore and blistered, unraveled like dirty sneakers, and
recanvassed to lay the foundation of this hellish wasteland

you have made as a home for me




Stormgoblin wrote the above. And I'm not sure if i can understand it all.

Re: A home you made for me


You shouldn't try to understand people who smoke pot...

Arthur, the poem is actually quite good in a warped and morbid way. She/He is simply looking at the angry and macabre side of love.

Perhaps the fact that it is Edgar Allen Poe's birthday may have something to do with it. maybe pot; maybe opium; poppies and pleasure don't often go together.

Hello Arthur and Letty

I hope you don't mind, but your idea inspired me.
I know it's not a traditional love poem, but thought
you might like to read it anyway, as it came from you.


A love poem - for nuclear disarmament

We can use our eyes - to see the truth
Our ears - to hear a lie for a lie
Our minds to accept and learn
Our lips to speak out in turn

We can give up world-wide nuclear arms
And shoulder the burden of peace
If our helping hands are willing to share
If our dragging feet can take us there

We can use our brains - to make a change
Our hearts - to heal the pain
Our dreams - to keep the future alive
And our human instinct - to survive


Endy

Endy, that is the type love poem that the world needs to learn by rote. Great, buddy. I do hope that Arthur reads it to his aspiring poets.

hello Endy,

thanx so very much for your contribution. I like your poem a lot. and I'm going to read it to my "Brat Brigades".


Arthur

Hello Arthur

Hope they don't give you a hard time over it. (It may be too romantic for them)

If any of them improve on it, or change the theme again, maybe you could post it here? It's just a thought. maybe not possible, but it might be interesting to see how far this thing could evolve.

Anyway, I'm glad you liked it. Personally, I think the title is the best thing about it.

best to you
and thankyou Letty,

Endy