I am writing a description for a video game that I am working on and I can't tell if this is grammatically correct. It seems like something is off but I just don't know what it is. Can anyone help?
Choose from a diverse cast of feisty little characters to battle through the harsh trenches of flavorful pastry warzones. Each blub boasts their own special combination of 5 different characteristics that bring a one of a kind experience to every battle. These fundamental skills include: speed, strength, health, agility and elusiveness. Here's a sneak peak of the starting blub gang lineup: Here’s a sneak peak of the starting lineup of the blub gang: (then listed them below)
Not really, you put a colon before a list and it looks like you have two lists, therefore two colons.
Tue 15 Jan, 2019 11:36 am
You don’t need both of those last sentences. (I thought you were giving us a choice)
Tue 15 Jan, 2019 08:42 pm
Choose from a diverse cast of feisty little characters to DO battle IN the harsh trenches of flavorful pastry war zones, ONCE MORE UNTO THE BRIOCHE. Each BLUB boasts AN EXTRAORDINARY combination of FIVE characteristics that bring a UNIQUE experience to every battle. These fundamental skills ARE : speed, strength, ENERGY, agility and elusiveness. Here's a sneak PEEK AT the starting BLUB gang LINE - UP (NO COLON).