Scrap it and start again.
-Announcing yourself is silly, they will know who you are by the accompanying applicatiom
-110 of what? What score is this supposed to represent? ACT, SAT, ASVAB... Specify what test and how it correlates to what the entry requirements are
-Who cares where your parents are from? Use it only to prove your heritage, not making it a side bar to your essay
- your interest in math and physics raised more and more....what?
-Again, test scores of what? Lose the "therefore," it's understood you graduated high school or you wouldn't be applying for college
And that's just the first paragraph....
Then you skip ahead and say you already have a Bachelor's. Again, that's implied since you are entering post-graduate studies.
Rewrite the entire essay.