Please proofread and edit this paragraph taken from a college application essay.

I truly value the critical thinking and analytical skills fostered in the University of X. It would be immensely exciting for me to play a dynamic role in fostering these skills even further. At the X campus, societies such as the Y Society provide an opportunity to share my own experiences with promoting critical thinking and skepticism in India. I have personally tried to cultivate critical thinking and skepticism in my own country; inevitably, I was met with strong resistance. This resistance propelled me to expand my knowledge of human behavior and attitude and enhance my interpersonal skills. My expansion of knowledge, I believe, helped make my ways of reaching out to people more inclusive.