Passport and ticket
where ever I want to go!
Travel on the net!
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Clary
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Sat 15 May, 2004 03:36 pm
Travel on the net!
Buy, cry, live and die on it.
It's the stuff of life.
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BoGoWo
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Sat 15 May, 2004 03:40 pm
it's the 'stuff of life',
the endless ebb and flow
leading inexorably to death.
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Clary
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 03:42 pm
That has 9 syllables, your last line, bogowo!
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cavfancier
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 03:43 pm
I think you overstepped your syllables there Bo, you are three too many.
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BoGoWo
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Sat 15 May, 2004 03:49 pm
what does any one out there susspect that i have any idea at all of what i am doing??
er,
it's the 'stuff of life',
the endless ebb and flow
leading to instant death.
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cavfancier
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 03:53 pm
Now you are two syllables short. You need 17.
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cavfancier
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 03:54 pm
5, 7, 5 is the traditional English interpertation of Haiku structure, but truthfully, in Japan, it's only the number of syllables that matters, not necessarily how they are structured.
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devriesj
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Sat 15 May, 2004 03:55 pm
short just one on the last line, BGW. Don't mean to pick on ya! You know it's easy! Just 5 - 7 - 5 syllables in each line respectively.
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BoGoWo
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Sat 15 May, 2004 04:31 pm
i really don't see what's wrong with it...............
and let that last line be a warning to ya!
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colorbook
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Sat 15 May, 2004 04:41 pm
Your signature: to err is human; to screw up completely, divine!
(and, for everything else, there's Mastercard!)
It looks as though you are enjoying this.
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devriesj
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 04:47 pm
ok, I'm gonna hike up my pants & wade through this mess! The last line in question is:
"leading to instant death."
I will now be taking poetic licnese:
leading to "quick" death
is what writing haiku does
when you're BoGoWo.
...she said wiping the sweat off her brow.
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BoGoWo
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Sat 15 May, 2004 04:57 pm
when you're BoGoWo,
you need some help removing
knives from in your back!
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cavfancier
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 05:02 pm
Knives from your back, wow,
so so melodramatic,
I shall brew some tea.
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BoGoWo
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Sat 15 May, 2004 05:10 pm
I shall brew some tea.
we shall drink very much
then we shall pee, he, he, he.
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devriesj
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Sat 15 May, 2004 05:24 pm
thanks BGW...
then we shall pee-hee
after drinking our brewed tea
we'll call it "tee-pee"...
(hee-hee!)
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BoGoWo
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 05:45 pm
i laughed so hard, I ..........
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devriesj
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Sat 15 May, 2004 06:00 pm
I'm so glad you liked it!
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colorbook
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 06:46 pm
we'll call it "tee-pee"...
we drink to our hearts desire
and try not to laugh
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devriesj
1
Sat 15 May, 2004 07:07 pm
and try not to laugh
as we dance sloppy and drunk
at this cotillion
