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Neverending Haiku chain

 
 
vonny
 
  1  
Wed 8 Jan, 2014 04:12 pm
@ossobuco,
the joy of seeing
The joy of taste and of touch
the senses delight
Dutchy
 
  1  
Wed 8 Jan, 2014 05:41 pm
@vonny,
The senses delight.
When she's in your arms at last,
happy like a kid.
vonny
 
  1  
Mon 20 Jan, 2014 03:51 pm
@Dutchy,
happy like a kid
Gambolling in the meadow
full of joyous fun
spendius
 
  1  
Mon 20 Jan, 2014 06:19 pm
@vonny,
full of joyous fun
juddering like a jelly
stuck up Nellie's bun.
firefly
 
  1  
Mon 20 Jan, 2014 06:27 pm
@spendius,
"Stuck up Nellie's bun"
Was a song we used to sing,
On bus trips to games
Dutchy
 
  1  
Mon 20 Jan, 2014 09:24 pm
@firefly,
On bus trips to games,
so they found one another
ready for a play.
Daisy Ryder
 
  1  
Sat 25 Jan, 2014 07:33 pm
@Dutchy,
Ready for a play.
Oh my, for now and all time.
Leave the past behind.
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tetratron
 
  1  
Sat 25 Jan, 2014 08:27 pm
Leave the past behind
Put the future in mind
then, success you shall find
firefly
 
  1  
Sat 25 Jan, 2014 10:41 pm
@tetratron,
Hi, tetratron. A Haiku has 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second line, and 5 in the third line.

So, I've got to drop one of the syllables in your last line.

Success you shall find
If you focus on a goal,
That works like a charm
Daisy Ryder
 
  1  
Sun 26 Jan, 2014 10:16 am
@firefly,
That works like a charm.
Very nice fix, I must say.
Politeness is rare.
firefly
 
  1  
Sun 26 Jan, 2014 09:14 pm
@Daisy Ryder,
Politeness is rare
But so appreciated,
We need more of it
vonny
 
  1  
Mon 27 Jan, 2014 03:19 pm
@firefly,
We need more of it
And more daydreams in the sun
And more honesty
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tetratron
 
  2  
Mon 27 Jan, 2014 07:41 pm
So like it doesn't have to rhyme, it's all about the syllable rule? Pardon my curiosity, i'm more into writing rap and and this is a bit new.
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tetratron
 
  1  
Mon 27 Jan, 2014 07:47 pm
And more Honesty
The truth, till they arrest me
West is where West be
vonny
 
  1  
Tue 28 Jan, 2014 05:23 am
@tetratron,
Quote:
i'm more into writing rap and and this is a bit new.

(Sounds good to me - I'm pretty new to it too, but firefly's a good teacher!)

West is where West be
A distant place it beckons
Says hello to me
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ossobuco
 
  1  
Tue 28 Jan, 2014 05:06 pm
Says hello to me,
he said of the mockinbird...
No more hellos, please!
vonny
 
  1  
Wed 29 Jan, 2014 03:39 am
@ossobuco,
No more hellos, please!
Time to say farewell - goodbye
My journey's over
firefly
 
  1  
Wed 29 Jan, 2014 05:46 am
@vonny,
My journey's over,
But what a great trip it's been!
Priceless memories

vonny
 
  1  
Fri 31 Jan, 2014 05:06 am
@firefly,
Priceless memories
Kept in boxes of the mind
Opened rarely now
iamsam82
 
  2  
Sun 2 Feb, 2014 07:57 am
@vonny,
Opened rarely now
When days are governed by work,
My mind is kept closed.
 

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