Thu 27 Dec, 2007 04:55 am - I like this poem. But I feel the way the lines are separated makes it a little off beat or off rythym. Fix that and you got a goodie. keep it up boss (view)
Thu 27 Dec, 2007 04:52 am - I fell as you walked
dreamed as you sleep
choked when you ate
and cried when you laughed
Tall and proud as you were
I saw light from the darkest space
endless dreams and open doors
all... (view)
Thu 27 Dec, 2007 04:39 am - Thank you roger and Leaka for you're input. It was ver much helpful.
As for more desciptive??? i personally believe it is very clear but then again i wrote it lol thanks guys! I am working on... (view)
