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I miss you

 
 
Reply Thu 27 Dec, 2007 04:52 am
I fell as you walked
dreamed as you sleep
choked when you ate
and cried when you laughed

Tall and proud as you were
I saw light from the darkest space
endless dreams and open doors
all slammed shut on deaf ears

To hear the sound
is to feel your pain
to feel you beat in womb
is one to you never the same

I miss you now
shoots of pain in my chest
two too much all ask how

I wait for you
not much gain
I call for you
echoes the same
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SULLYFISH66
 
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Reply Thu 27 Dec, 2007 08:59 pm
back to the drawing board on this one . . .

take out half the words.
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garth809
 
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Reply Thu 27 Dec, 2007 11:47 pm
Honetsty is what I'm looking for here. And you were honest. Thanks.
Hit and miss.
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