Sat 30 Jul, 2005 09:47 am - If this is deeply personal, I apologize, but it really lacks any measure of successful delivery. You have a relevant, modern idea but you put it in an acrostic cage, then quickly shoot it dead with... (view)
Fri 29 Jul, 2005 07:24 pm - Beautiful language. It sounds bitter, and sharp. I can't help but love the use of the clichés and little bits of society we take for granted. The imagery is small flashes of seemingly... (view)
Fri 22 Jul, 2005 11:13 am - I'm a little confused, are you fighting some kind of second personality? What's with the uncharacteristically sub-par, less than intelligent replies? The ?'got-cha's? The... (view)
Thu 21 Jul, 2005 10:34 pm - Slow down, it takes us a while to get to you.
This has been done, that said, it's not horrible but it's not great. Where's the time signature? The sheet music proving this can... (view)
Tue 19 Jul, 2005 10:33 pm - Some of your character's observations are humorous and interesting. This just suffers from a slow intro, it does little to hook the audience and requires a very devoted person to get into the... (view)
Tue 19 Jul, 2005 10:25 pm - I fail to grasp the purpose, point and general reasoning behind the piece. I feel that you could take the form somewhere, but the message is lacking.
Scrapz, no one's going to take you... (view)
Sun 17 Jul, 2005 11:01 pm - She was a fanatic wiccan. With half of the prayer-beads ever produced around her neck. She wore tie-dye to a funeral, held protest signs for women's rights while wearing a full length sky blue... (view)
Sun 17 Jul, 2005 01:15 pm - Upon checking The Sun, it seems like an interesting magazine. I think it'd be a great place to submit the story and try to get it published. Thanks for pointing me in that direction. (view)
Sun 17 Jul, 2005 12:47 pm - Well, that's certainly nice of you to say. I'm a little speachless and initially weary of sarcasm. Writing a response to what you said is harder than writing the piece. I don't think... (view)
Sun 17 Jul, 2005 12:17 pm - Talk about what? The piece or your response?
I'd love to talk about the writing and I'm glad you meant what you said. (view)
