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Sat 21 Oct, 2006 08:18 pm
Just wrote this to stop dwelling.
One Night
Sleeping for years
Keeping my tears
Roused and shaken
I was not mistaken
Aroused to new heights
I turned out the lights
Then turned you around
To go to sleep sound
My heart was asurge
But my instincts did urge
To remember the past
Loss of trust and those last
Lost in my maze
Waiting for days
You founded my fears
And released my tears
Well, it's a nice try,
but with me it doesn't fly,
On this make no mistake.
You see, the ability to rhyme
Does not a poet make.
Burma Shave.
i never claimed to be a poet, just heartbroken.
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i like it... and if you're a starter like me than it's totally awesome...it's been days since i've read a rhyme...
kool dude..
thanks for the support
blacksmithn, do you have any constructive criticism? i tried to pm you, but i am too new to the forums. pm me back if you can.
Thanks for the feedback, blacksmithn. I am well aware that poetry doesn't have to rhyme, but I actually find it fun to try. I also find that it gets me thinking about new ways to say things, because within the confines of rhyme you have to get a bit more creative with language.
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