Random Story I wrote

It's pretty good; the general idea of the nature of the events and characters is communicated well, but what are you building up upon?
I couldn't get the underlying meaning........why are the brothers doing all the killing, is it awfully necessary to kill to get those powers, and what will those powers give them when in the end they have to go to Hell?

Plus, you told too little about the Father and what was he gonna get by making the deal of dead bodies for the powers??

Hope it helps......reply to these questions. Maybe then I'll understand your style even better.

But I have to say it sustained my interest, which in itself is 'interesting'. :wink:

LEENA

lol
A man meets a girl in a bar and asks do u wanna play magic
the girl replys ' what kind of magic? '
The man says we go back to my place and **** then you dissapear..

MC 3xecution says:

What does that have to do with the story?