Mystic Poetry

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I lie here
in a world of sorrows
swirling mists
of dark red and grey
cloudy skies
and sunlight blocked
misty noons
and hopes dimmed
hard as they try
rays don't come through
the dusk is dark
day has no meaning
I stand straight
as I hear
a bird calling
from behind me far!
I swirl around
Black Raven arrives
'O Black Bird,
a sign of Death.
I raise my hand
so it could land
as it does
it gives me a peck
dark crimson blood
as I wince in pain
still I'm numb, I've
lost my warnth
blood trickles down
down my pale flesh
it makes its way
nowhere it ends
death has arrived
I am aware
death holds ties
with my fate
I am not scared
nor am I meak
it was always
a fascination to me
I've been waiting
lost for years
I've been counting
my days left
Black One can be happy
if he wants to be
but he doen't know
what I will do
Dark Lord can celebrate
His mortal success,
I will take revenge
from all my foes
Once again, as I go
I am cold, cold as snow....


LEENA

P.S. any constructive feedback is welcome.

WHISPERS.....


Among the dark worlds you think
A presence is well known
Among the wicked things you treasure
Is a heart you'll never re-own
Among the coldness you concieve
A flame nearby still burns
Among the ebony alleys you walk
One brought you to my shore
Among the rocky cliffs you saw
Lies my Ocean of deepest depth
Among te noisy loveless world
My silence also sings
Among the rythmless tunes you hear
My melody smoothly flows
Among the feelings you so hide
Resides a confession; true!
Among the insensitive "crapheads" aroung
I am the One who dares to seek
And among the subtle, secret whispers in your ear....
.....is a whisper of a Friend.

LEENA.

This isn't exactly mystic but I thought I'd write this, too.


SHUT UP LOSER!

You don't understand, you never even tried
Yet you assume you have known it all
You shut your mind, you can't concieve
Yet you try to make me look bad

I thouhgt at least you knew this one
looks can be decieving, can be killing too!
You were lazy, you didn't bother with it
Yet you balme me for your faulty perception

You don't know, not even my name
How can you day I am the same?
Smae as the sinful, the worthless being
Youe eyes are blinded and I shouldn't be ashamed

You fail to invision, you believe in just covers
You can't read, you can't even see right
It wasn't me, it was you all along
You created this hell then named it after me

No worries, friend, I'm not aaking you to speak
You can stroll along pretending to be good
It's okay for you, don't move your lips
But the truth, my friend, reveals itself

One day you will be caught in your own trap
One day you'll regret what you chose for me
Cause it will all backfire, on you that is
And that day, friend, is not so far

LEENA

yo!
dude these are totally amazing...
ps i already knew! (lol)

MOONLIT NIGHTS

When skies are dark
When lights are dimmed
I walk alone
In the moonlit nights
Cold as ice
I get caught
by the winds
in a draught
I wrap it around me
like a winter coat
Still I'm opposed
by the ruffling gusts
Pitiless storms in these
Merciless Nights
Full moon's high
Stars are bright
Twinkling lights
in the sight
Mountain peaks look wicked
My hopes are shy
I doubt if I should try
Gaining my strength
Gathering my courage
I hold steady
to nothingness
My faith has been tested
My belief shaken
My life a mystery
in this unknown abyss
I'm loosing warnth
Numbness is my fate
Rigid as a twig
Frozen I stay
Between my last breaths
One last thing to say:
'How many would've been caught,
dead in moonlit nights?'

LEENA

wow.thats really cool

LOVE IS LOST

Love is lost
Belief is tossed
Hand to hand
In this strager land
Desires have cost
Indeed alot
Innocent wishes
Like broken dishes
Away friends faded
Hopes cascaded
Sorrows and pain
Tries in vain
Too much it asks
The voice behind the mask
Merciless wrath
The spell it had cast
No escape
Those eyes under cape
With hypnotic rays
Once again she betrays
The soul now sings
The song begins
And cut is the thread
With a chant of death

LEENA

UNTITLED

As the ice cold breezes blow
Yet the old mysteries grow

Twisting and twirling quite strangely though
If secrets unleashed you'd forget your vow

The claim you claimed of ages ago
Betrayal had proven you forever low

Your shallow self and the seeds you sow
Your slaves of mistrust; to you they shall bow

You'll cut the crops, yes you alone...
For by that time I'll be surely gone

You'll wait and wait for waiting's sake
And the guilt will eat you like a snake

Then maybe you will finally see
Your sins for which I made you pay

LEENA

...
lost in thoughts now...
ps can't speak...wordless!!!

keep writing poems - your work shows great promise

One tip - check your poems for errors - an odd word can stop the important 'flow' of narrative for the reader

hope that's of some help

good luck

Yes Endy, I'll bear that in mind.
Flow is a very imporant part of a poem.
Thanks for the feedback.

Reading my post again after all this time I think I sound like a pompous t*at
- so thanks for not seeing it that way yourself.

I like your poems - they seem quite musical
Peace
Endy

You make me smile, because music is said to be the fuel of the soul.

Anyways, my irregularity is in debt to the fact that I was caught up in academics and the net gets busted every alternate day or so.
Anyways, thankyou for lifting my spirit.

I was kind of uncertain about my poems but that uncertainity seems to be disappearing now.

love,
Leena.

Me and Cassandra

A certain bird who had years of my trust
told me that Cassandra hated me
As I sat down to ponder, just then
my beloved Friend from afar dropped by
She also had an elusive smile
and remarked that Cassandra missed me
A few brief moments later she left
saying she must really be gone
The very next day, visited by, as I sat
by an old, dear, sweet, charming rat
I learnt a lesson that surprised me a bit
I learned that Cassandra needed me
I got worked up; it must've been so
I packed up and begun my trail
But when I rested upon her door
I was shocked that Cassandra didn't discern me
Was it that bird, or rat, or my beloved Friend from afar?
Was it Cassandra herself after all?
Till now I had been so sure of myself
till now I had not been betrayed.

hmmm....provokes my thought,Lee, this last one really does!
Keep posting
Love
Naima

I definitely will, Naima.

And love you all the same.

UNTITILED

The few words you randomly said
walking down the street
left me shattered beyond repair

The few times you randomly ignored me
as I stood there
left me bleeding beyond relief


How can I believe in unconditional love
that you had promised me, somewhat afar?
Because that love got conditioned
and I fell somewhere below your standards
So you could turn away and freeze me numb
So you could calmly walk away

Wrapped up so tightly in your glacial sphere
You cut me with you sedate
And solemnly stare at my dying corpse
as I wriggle for a few more breaths

You loved me so much; isn't that what you had said?
You loved me even more than my life
And so much of it you have already shown
Why not show me something worse, instead?

LEENA


I wrote this one when I was crying locked up in my room over something my mother had said, which had really hurt me.
Mother is reffered to as someone who always understands you and showers unconditional love but my mother is more than always somehow glacial towards me.
She loves my brother -- lot -- and it shows, but I somehow always get left behind.
This is no phobia, this is real, because once I was shaking hard as I was weeping on the floor(why--that's a long story) but she just stood there and dialled my Dad's number and told him to come 'handle' me. Where as when my brother sulks, she is always by his side.

Can you feel how much that hurts?

yes i can,,,,felt it all the way....

Dude, Naima, you're Near-Enthusiast and I'm still a NEWBIE!!!!!!!