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Are these lyrics any good?

 
 
Reply Wed 29 Apr, 2020 05:44 pm
Hey! Smile
I sometimes just write down some lyrics when I feel like it and was wondering if these are any good.
They kinda sound a bit overdramatic/ cheesy and I really don't know what to think about them. So I'd hope to hear some criticism - please by honest!

Thank you a lot!



What's my purpose in life?
My reason to live - why I'm alive?
Keep that out your mind, they say.
There'll come better times, it'll be alright.
But how to look forward, if all's hopeless, without meaning?
When it's hard to survive, to not try to die - to avoid suicide?

Talk bout how happiness is just a choice...
How you just have to give your best and work...
But how do that if you've got a voice,
that constantly reminds you of your hurt?
That you can't ignore, that can't be defeated.
That you live with day by day tryin' to find joy in little things,
that just vanish after you start to think.

After you use ur mind,
there's only depression you'll find.

So tell me how can I choose to be happy?
If I am not able to choose how I feel?
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Reply Thu 18 Jun, 2020 09:42 am
I have to leave you some solidity within these lyrical fatalies cus I'll rip your spine out and freeze it back together release snakes from my hands and remove the mask and reveal my skull if your skills are weak then I'ma tear yo ass to red shrivels and bury you with a shovel in the meridian Graves and proceed across the median flowing through the process release hella demons in the progress
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Reply Thu 18 Jun, 2020 12:48 pm
@Mag1calMe,
I don’t know if anyone can really tell you the answer to that.

It works as a poem alright.

Lyrics are something else. If you wrote down the lyrics of a lot of popular songs they’d look total crap, but sound OK. The you’ve got some songs you can’t even hear the lyrics because they’re completely unintelligible.

Don’t worry what people on the Internet say anyway, keep writing.
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