I hope, with all my heart, that one of you be willing to help me with the profile letter attached to CV. I inform you that I'm not an English native speaker.
Thanks in advance!
The letter in question is this: I worked for almost three years in a notorious retail store. My professional role was the visual merchandiser. But even before this relevant and pleasant work experience, I've always been fascinated by the sale's world. For this reason I attended various courses inherent in matter, done research, purchased books and put into practice what I learned. What I like most about this profession it's that psychological and creative aspects are combined with organisational and marketing aspects. Because nowadays, the visual merchandiser's figure must be able to create a satisfactory and suitable shopping experience to the customer.
For one thing, definitely drop the word "notorious". The word indeed does mean famous, but in a really bad way. It is seldom to your advantage to directly insult a former employer.
By the way dale, since you are so aggrieved over CV being used (which is industry standard), how is it, you then give us 'def' instead or spelling out either define or definition? I am hopeful that this will learn you to cease and desist with your often idiotic, in fact asinine, abbreviations.
how is it, you then give us 'def' ....cease and desist...idiotic, in fact asinine, abbreviations
No excuse whatever. However, Urg, why do so many of you fellas insist on reading every one of my postings when I keep tellin' ya you non't needta, I won't be hurt....
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Novizio
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Fri 7 Apr, 2017 07:20 am
@roger,
Thanks a lot Roger!
If you have any suggestions then let me know, and I will be happy to take them into account.
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Fil Albuquerque
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Fri 7 Apr, 2017 07:48 am
@Novizio,
Well can't you sell yourself without help ? Avoid words like "fascinated", used "interested" instead.
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ekename
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Fri 7 Apr, 2017 11:05 pm
@Novizio,
dear sir,
salesperson vacancy #867-5309
i wish to be considered for the position of salesperson advertised on the wall
in support of my application i provide the following personal particulars in addition to the attached resume
my work experience includes three years in the employ of a well regarded retail store
my professional role there was as a visual merchandiser
however my ambition was always to graduate to the sales environment
i have attended several courses, researched the topic, purchased and read several texts and put into practice what i learned from these studies
this sales position combines my professional interest in the psychological and creative aspects of retail trade with my well developed organisational and marketing skills
i look forward to discussing my application for the position with you in greater depth at a mutually convenient time.