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Please help me to check my writing

 
 
Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 03:34 am
I'm getting ready for my language exam. This is my first writing. :

Entry for tourist guide – Boldogkői Vár

I’m quite sure that not many tourist has visited the north-east part of Hungary yet because that is definitely not the most popular part of Hungary. Although not many go to Borsod Abauj Zemplén county, there are many lovely places to visit. If you like ancient castles chances are you would be thrilled to see this one. It’s very easy to get there, it’s only 15 kilometres from the closest town. You might have heard about Encs. It’s famous for it’s brand new reformed church. You can get to the castle by car, by public transport ot if you are a hiking person you might want to walk there from the closest village – Boldogkőújfalu. To reach the castle it’s easy to walk anyways, the sidewalk is not steep at all. Surrounding the castle you will walk through vineyards. The castle itself was built in the XIII. century and was renewed a few years ago. There is also a museum to see with all kinds of interesting ancient objects to look at, furthermore the entrance fee is very cheap. Walking around the place is really peaceful most of the time however sometimes there are different kind of attractions – May 1st celebrations, weddings for instance. The scenery is wonderful, especially when you get behind the castle. If the weather makes it possible you can see really far from it. Marvelous walking tours are available as well where all you have to do is to follow the different coloured signs. At the closest village, you may rent bicycles to ride around and it is available from spring through autumn at a fairly cheap price. If you get hungry please don’t hesitate to choose the restaurant which is built right at the side of the castle. They have waiters who are dressed up as ancient knights. You will feel like you flew back a few centuries.
 
hightor
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 05:09 am
@veneziadrive,
Nice writing — I want to go there!

Here's a few minor corrections:
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I’m quite sure that not many tourist has visited the north-east part of Hungary yet

You can say "not many a tourist has visited" or "not many tourists have visited"
Quote:
It’s famous for it’s brand new reformed church.

"Its" is the possessive, "it's" is the contraction for "it is". The phrase should be "its brand new reformed church".
Quote:
At the closest village, you may rent bicycles to ride around and it is available from spring through autumn at a fairly cheap price.

"And they are available" — "bicycles" is a plural noun.

Some changes to the writing style could be made but the paragraph is easily understandable. Good job.

veneziadrive
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 05:45 am
@hightor,
Thank you so much. As I can see I made mistakes I really shouldn't have... :-( These are grammar points which are really a shame that I missed.
Thank you again.

Would you mind reading through my other writing as well? (I have 3 more I just wrote this morning.) Or should I open a new thread every single time?
I'm new here, please let me know.

hightor
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 06:00 am
@veneziadrive,
Put them right on this thread — everything will be in one place then.
veneziadrive
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 08:55 am
@hightor,
School Magazine
Secondary Schoool Article about favourite teacher

As a secondary school student at Ady Endre Secondary School it is quite a hard thing for me to choose my favourite teacher. Actually, we have plenty great ones over here whom I adore so it’s a pity to nominate only one. Although it’s hard to choose I’m not going to put it off any more. I have to tell you that Janos Sereg is the best teacher you can ever wish for. He is an old fashioned teacher, who teaches me not just one subject. He has been my teacher for 3 years. He is an experienced and talented person, who teaches Hungarian literature and grammar in the mornings and music in the afternoons. In the morning lessons he makes everything really interesting. (Poems, fiction, non-fiction. Even the hardest grammar points and XXI. century Hungarian literature can be fun if you have an excellent tutor.) I always get the feeling that I love all the topics we cover. And believe me, I’m not his only fan!
In the afternoons he gives music lessons where we have one-to-one teaching and play a musical instrument. Learning how to play the flute is not what we do. We are beyond that. His job here is to share his knowledge about the music in the XVI. century. All the composers and their pieces of music are fascinating, not to mention their style which is not easy sometimes but always bearable.
Janos Sereg is a strict teacher, but in a way where you can be completely fine with it. I will always be grateful for all what he does and I will always remember his lessons.
veneziadrive
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 08:58 am
@hightor,
Restoring Preserving and Protecting architecturally significant buildings in my country

The importance of protecting architecturally significant buildings is crucial these days in Hungary. Walking around in the city of Budapest you are to see wonderful buildings which were built centuries ago and in my opinion it is really sad to see how time destroys them. There are places, especially in downtown where you may see the government has already paid attention to these, and delegated specialists to restore them. And this is only what we see from the outside. Churches, mansions, cathedrals have wonderful architectural things to look at from the inside, but these are at risk as well. Buildings do need to get the attention to every single building that we have, it’s just a hard thing because of all finances. When the question arises, what can you do about it? Well, you can definitely watch out for vandals in the city who think it is creative to spray graffities on walls – you might want to report these to the police to keep your city a better place. Having guards in and close to churches is another thing maybe people should consider.
veneziadrive
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 09:00 am
@hightor,
Agnes Csernatony
Liszt Ferenc u 28
1041 Budapest

March 4th, 2017.

John Smith
Mayor of Káposztásmegyer
24 Main Street
1049 Budapest

Dear Mayor,

I am writing to you as one of your citizens in Káposztásmegyer, because I have read that there might be a new superstore building with a casino and night clubs very close to where I live.
Kaposztasmegyer is a nice and peaceful part of the city with wonderful green fields, parks and we don’t have a lot through traffic now. The things I have just mentioned above are the reasons why I don’t think this superstore would be a good idea.
First of all, I believe that green fields are very important for our environment. Secondly, a superstore with 400 outlets would increase the traffic a lot in our community. Furthermore, why would anyone want to attract all the shoppers to a suburban shopping centre? It would mean the death of other shops that are already running in the centre of town. Last, but not least I would like to mention that running a casino is really a dangerous thing because of the danger of people get addicted to gambling. Not to mention that the superstore would not be able to be reached without a car anyway.
Please reconsider my ideas over yours in the town council and if it’s not possible to disregard the whole idea, at least please try to change on it by reducing the size and all the things that were planned previously.
Yours faithfully,


Agnes Cs.
hightor
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 09:34 am
@veneziadrive,
I want to take classes with Janos Sereg!
Quote:
... it is quite a hard thing for me to choose...

This works. But you can also say "it is quite difficult for me to choose" — both are fine, sometimes it's good to know other ways of presenting and idea.
Quote:
Actually, we have plenty great ones over here whom I adore so it’s a pity to nominate only one.

we have plenty of great ones
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hightor
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 09:46 am
@veneziadrive,
Quote:
Walking around in the city of Budapest you are to see wonderful buildings which were built centuries ago...

"you will see wonderful buildings"
Quote:
There are places, especially in downtown where you may see the

"There are places, especially downtown where you may see..."
or
"There are places, especially in the downtown area where you may see..."
Quote:
Churches, mansions, cathedrals have wonderful architectural things to look at from the inside

"Churches, mansions, and cathedrals have wonderful architectural things to look at from the inside"
You could also say it this way:
"Churches, mansions, and cathedrals have wonderful architectural things to observe from the inside"
Quote:
graffities

I believe that "graffiti" is already a plural form.
Quote:
Having guards in and close to churches is another thing maybe people should consider.

I think this works a little better:
"Having guards in and close to churches is another thing that people might consider."



hightor
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 09:57 am
@veneziadrive,
Quote:
and we don’t have a lot through traffic now.

" and we don’t have a lot of through traffic now."
Quote:
because of the danger of people get addicted to gambling.

"because of the danger of people getting addicted to gambling.
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Not to mention that the superstore would not be able to be reached without a car anyway.

"Not to mention that the superstore would be unreachable without a car anyway."
or
" Not to mention that the superstore could not be reached without a car anyway."
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Please reconsider my ideas over yours in the town council

I think I would put it this way:
"Please consider my ideas along with yours"

dalehileman
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 01:56 pm
@veneziadrive,
I’m quite sure that not many tourists have yet visited the Northeast Hungary, Borsod Abauj Zemplén County, because that is definitely not the most popular part of the country though having many lovely places to visit. For instance, if you're intrigued by ancient castles, chances are you'll be thrilled ....

Now Ven we need only 22 more....

Also needs paras and carrets
dalehileman
 
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Reply Sat 4 Mar, 2017 05:34 pm
@dalehileman,
Come on somebody
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veneziadrive
 
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Reply Sun 5 Mar, 2017 09:16 am
@hightor,
Thank you so much for all your work here!
hightor
 
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Reply Sun 5 Mar, 2017 11:28 am
@veneziadrive,
You're welcome. Your English is very good and your assignment painted a very interesting picture of contemporary Hungary.
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camlok
 
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Reply Tue 11 Apr, 2017 12:31 am
@hightor,
Quote:
I believe that "graffiti" is already a plural form.


graffiti is an uncountable in English.
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