Who gets the book, stuh or myself? I have some stylistic points that I want to address a bit later today, if you don't mind. You did mention that you were trying out new forms. I just happen to have some passing knowledge of Constantine from years ago (history class), but stuh makes a point that perhaps what you want to convey may need a bit more explication, or some expansion. I'm going to give it a few more rereads, and think about it. I think it is a very good framework, but it reads like some of the stuff I write, that comes directly from my head, and I forget that what I need to convey to the reader may be missed. 'White Raven' is a good example. I probably won't edit it, but my wife was going over some of the pieces I want to submit, and gave me good advice, but when she read that one, she just said, "Okay, I have no idea what you're talking about here, and I won't even try."
