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Wed 8 Sep, 2004 08:58 am
i shut my eyes tight trying to bring an image of her silly little face
oh it's been so long since i've seen it!
those tangled locks that no brush could conquer!
that crooked grin that could make anybody suddenly laugh
and her eyes... they were pure and innocent
unseeing of the corrupt and sinful world in which she lived
ridgecreek, that was her world
in this magical world, neighbors actually said hello
a scraped knee due to racing down devil's hill in a shiney red wagon was a badge of honor
...and hope was instilled for every penny thrown down a wishing well (a nickel would ensure even more!)
but those days are gone
surely as the seasons change, she has changed
i didn't see her slowly fading away
and if i had, i sure would have grabbed on to her a little tighter
now she is soiled stained and sinned
her dreams today are, in fact, just dreams
i miss her
she was...
my childhood
-mchol
hey mchol I think that's beautiful
I especially like this part:
i didn't see her slowly fading away
and if i had, i sure would have grabbed on to her a little tighter
now she is soiled stained and sinned
her dreams today are, in fact, just dreams
you may want to remove the extra 'e' from shiny
That is nice mchol...but in a sad kind of way.
great poem mchol. i appreciated it greatly.
an excersize my mom had me do as a teen after a TRAUMATIC event is at night when the worst of thoughts crowd your thoughts is to think back, imagine yourself as a child and recall sights, sounds, scents , people and reintroduce the new you to the child you once were.she would sit on my bed and tell me stories about my childhood and every one of those conversations are precious. its important that even though those days have slipped away that child is still within you and deserves attention. now i'm a grandmother and i've seen myself in my children and now my grandchild and i do the same for them.
"remember when" is a great conversation starter.
A beautiful poem, form-free and evocative. Very well done! KAV
Thanks ya'll for the feedback, I really appreciate it. I didn't come up with this on the intention of getting praise, I just wished I could live one day in my childhood every year to remind me of the beauty in innocence.
A great piece of work here, I loved it. Thanks for sharing!
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