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Sat 7 Aug, 2004 01:12 pm
I'm a little nervous about this one but I thought I'd post it anyway. Be gentle!
I wish I could live in the sun light,
In the rise and the fall of the Sun,
But my life takes me into dark places
Where my heart's own dark sorrow has won
I bathe long in eve's golden glory,
And dream of Forever Love,
But the cold and the dark soon come calling,
And I hide from the cold stars above
I long for the kiss of the Sun on my lips,
For the warmth of it stroking my skin,
A lover to hold me and carry me now
Into dreams of adventure and whim
And so as I lie here in darkness
I close my eyes tight to my fear,
I shall not admit to my sadness,
I'll never let fall one more tear!
Absolutely fabulous, fortune. It is difficult to write a poem that rhymes, and you have accomplished it beautifully. So melancholy, but so right.
Why should you be nervous?
To be honest Letty, I am not much in the habit of exhibiting my poetry, so I'm never quite sure whether the things I've written are actually readable or if it's just going to sound silly to someone else. Ah well, I'm no Poe, but I can usually make the words rhyme at least.
fortune, it is only through exhibition that we can explain what is in the soul, the heart, and the mind. The more we write, the better we write.
As for Poe, he was everything: A poet, a novelist, a critic, a short story writer. Sorta hard to follow in those footsteps.
Lovely Fortune! Are you interested in my perception of the theme?
I think you're dealing with a fear of loneliness...that the knight on the white charger will not find you...you're dreading and hoping. That's my interpretation...for what it's worth.
Very hard, Letty!
Panzade, interesting interpretation, that was actually a large part of what I was writing about! I deliberately didn't put in my motivations for writing this poem because I believe that, regardless of the authors intent, a person should be allowed to experience poetry from a personal perspective, find out what the words mean to them. In other words, I like the fact that people can have different interpretations of a single poem.
I like it too..the different interpretations. That was mine.
fortune, we're going to have to lure the panz into the original writing category. He has the soul of a musician, so why not lyric poetry.
Hey, if I can, you can, Panzade!
Oh , I've no fear of writing. It's singing that makes me nervous
This was lovely, Fortune. Letty had reason when she said that poetry that rhymes is difficult to write well; it can sometimes sound jangly and contrived, depending on how it is applied-- but this poem was fresh and flowing. It goes from being a poem metaphysically and then literally considering your ideal of love, to despair, to courage. I liked it because it delved into melancholia without being angsty-- it was delivered just right.
/incoherent praise over/
I just got a chuckle at drom's "incoherent praise over"
Quite inspirational, drom!
Who says writing poetry that rhymes is difficult?
I'll compose one right now, on the spot.
Sunlight and Shadow
By Ratzenhofer
The sunlight steamed in the door
In walked a whore
I waved a dollar and beckoned her
She smiled and dropped her fur
Soon we were writhing on the bed
visions of Gertrude danced in my head
I shuddered and moaned and then was done
She walked out the door, and blocked out the sun
See? Easy as that.
You can have the publishing rights, drom.
I'm really thinking about it after happy hour! Maybe the panz will write a song..sorta lends itself to the blues.
Gus, you are a wunderkind and a scholar. I will do wise things with that poem. Will you leave Stillwater and his menagerie and come with me to Armenia?
Will we dance with roses in our mouths?
fortune, see what you've started? You are the muse of amazing....
Later folks.
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