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Write 100 word paragraph using only 1 syllable words WINNER!

 
 
BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Tue 20 Jul, 2004 09:39 am
Region Philbis
Region Philbis, don't give up. Just change the repeated words to something else and you can still be proud of your paragraph and post it here.

BBB
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Tue 20 Jul, 2004 11:03 am
Muahaha, I won't be defeated so easily. Check the edit.
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Tue 20 Jul, 2004 11:33 am
Cav
Cav, more better.

BBB Very Happy
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jclarenc
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jul, 2004 12:52 pm
One-syllable paragraphs
Well, I decided to have a go at it. Here are my three attempts:

1. Our shelves boast three types of books: those we read for fun, tomes that help you learn, and works one looks things up in. All are good at what they do. To spend time well, or laugh a lot, read the first kind. If new skills should get learned, try plain old prose. True facts can be found from big, thick bound ones, where each page is filled with dates, names, times. Pick one, use care. Sit on soft chairs, scan fine print, font, type face, art work. Heed this thought: words bring growth, mirth, joy.

2.
I took my three year old son to the zoo. It was a cool June day. We drove our lime green Ford on back roads with less cars. At this site there are penned apes, big cats, bugs, snakes, birds of bright hues, large brown bears, black ones as well. Sleek seals swam in ponds; tired bats hung off tree limbs. All were scared by folks' noise, too loud for them. Ah! Those poor caged souls' lives! Let's hope parks can keep their crowds still, calm, so life is more sane where wild beasts eat, sleep and play.


3. Real good cooks bake sweets large crowds will love. To fix food that feeds two or four is no sweat, but just try a dish the whole big group can eat! It will take work, and seem hard. First, plan your day well. Pick one choice like cake, flan, pie, or egg bread. Make lists. Get up on time; shop at some store close by. Find tools: spoons, cups, bowls. Pour, stir, mix fast. Serve with hot tea, fresh milk, cold drinks, plus ice cream if it's warm out. Be sure you leave room for more guests than planned. Have fun!


I sent them all to marilyn...we'll see what happens. It's tough to write these things without sounding terribly juvenile! And I wonder about plurals; do they count?
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Clary
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jul, 2004 01:44 pm
very nice, jc - though I don't like 'less cars' - just being picky. I think the first and third are great!
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jclarenc
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jul, 2004 01:52 pm
I don't like "less cars" either--but "fewer" has two syllables, alas!
JC
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Region Philbis
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jul, 2004 01:52 pm
Re: One-syllable paragraphs
jclarenc, nice work! welcome to A2k.

i found "will" repeated in #3:
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3. Real good cooks bake sweets large crowds will love. To fix food that feeds two or four is no sweat, but just try a dish the whole big group can eat! It will take work, and seem hard. First, plan your day well. Pick one choice like cake, flan, pie, or egg bread. Make lists. Get up on time; shop at some store close by. Find tools: spoons, cups, bowls. Pour, stir, mix fast. Serve with hot tea, fresh milk, cold drinks, plus ice cream if it's warm out. Be sure you leave room for more guests than planned. Have fun!
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jclarenc
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jul, 2004 01:54 pm
Oh rats, you're right! I thought I'd fixed that. Darn. Thanks for catching it...
JC
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Fri 23 Jul, 2004 08:58 am
jclarenc
jclarenc, outstanding creativity and aptness with Marilyn's criteria. And welcome to A2K, so very glad to have you here.

BBB
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Spotmctavish
 
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Reply Fri 23 Jul, 2004 07:51 pm
The following came from my Local Newspaper BB. www.savannahnow.com



"Hot, wet town here this time of year. Rain, clouds and long walks make me sweat. Still, I go. It's good to move. Pain for gain. Cars drive by too close. Crowd my style. Cause a jump in the heart. Wow! There goes one now! Splash all on new clothes. Two more came back. Treads shot mud where some spots missed. Who drives so bad they can't, don't or won't look with safe eyes? Shoes are caked. Why would she do it? Force such poor slobs out her door? Not nice when any help might save them from their fate. " ~ Mr T. SavannahNow BB
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fortune
 
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Reply Sat 24 Jul, 2004 10:56 am
I must now think of things to say, strive for grace and style. But my pen tip set on the fresh, clean, white page will not flow or move one inch. Damn! Can a soul pull off this trick at all? Still, hope doth spring in most hearts, mine is yet bold. Oh dear freinds, be brave! Tasks are made so they might fall through time, great strain though they may prove. Try once more, twice, thrice, we wont bow down our heads! New thoughts rise quick, leave their mark, soon an end shall come. Sing with joy! It's done!
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Sat 24 Jul, 2004 02:18 pm
Fortune
Fortune, well done except for the they reuse and a couple of typos:

I must now think of things to say, strive for grace and style. But my pen tip set on the fresh, clean, white page will not flow or move one inch. Damn! Can a soul pull off this trick at all? Still, hope doth spring in most hearts, mine is yet bold. Oh dear freinds, be brave! Tasks are made so they might fall through time, great strain though they may prove. Try once more, twice, thrice, we wont bow down our heads! New thoughts rise quick, leave their mark, soon an end shall come. Sing with joy! It's done!

BBB
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Sat 24 Jul, 2004 02:20 pm
Spotmctavish
Spotmctavish, thanks for the paragraph you found. And welcome to Able2Know; glad to have you here.

BBB
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fortune
 
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Reply Sat 24 Jul, 2004 03:18 pm
Yup BBB, I kinda thought that would happen. I didn't actually proof read it.

I must now think of things to say, strive for grace and style. But my pen tip set on the fresh, clean, white page will not flow or move one inch. Damn! Can a soul pull off this trick at all? Still, hope doth spring in most hearts, mine is yet bold. Oh dear friends, be brave! Tasks are made so they might fall through time, great strain though said may prove. Try once more, twice, thrice, we won't bow down our heads! New thoughts rise quick, leave their mark, soon an end shall come. Sing with joy! It's done!

How's that? Can you see any other mistakes?
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Sat 24 Jul, 2004 03:47 pm
Fortune
Fortune, at this point after looking for so many duplicates, my eyes have glazed over and I wouldn't notice if a paragraph had fourteen Is in it.

BBB :wink:
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dp
 
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Reply Sat 24 Jul, 2004 06:54 pm
This is the paragraph I submitted (I wrote it as a story):

A cat and dog went to town. Each knew shops they might see. Pup thought he would eat at Dean's Bone Farm, while Kit sought out Mac's Mouse Pub. Once there, she saw her mom right down the road by Tom's String Store. No one else was near, so both walked up Oak Street where mice, birds, frogs, (but not bugs!) were on sale. Then some drunk guy's car ran off course, just two feet from their toes. What luck! It could have been worse. Too bad my words are all gone, or I'd do more of this fun thing.

dp

It was much harder to check than to write!
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Sun 25 Jul, 2004 12:49 pm
dp
Pup and Kits sound like some pets I've enjoyed.

BBB
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 08:11 pm
TAH DAH! And the winner is
The challenge: to write a 100-word paragraph with words of only one syllable but without repeating any words.

Marilyn vos Savant's favorite was a poem by Pam Capps, Celebration, Florida:

I love carbs, but they don't like me;
Look at my thighs, so all can see---
A curse that comes from too much pie,
Snack cakes, sweet tea, ham on rye.

Go to gym four times per week,
Dance class twice, stay with beat,
Bend knees, side step, back once more,
Hang tough, fall down, hit the floor.

Jump rope, biker hard, swim ten laps,
Push up, pull back, walk real fast.
Lean, mean shape and abs of steel,
Less food in, needs good strong will.

Now, for you, this tale is done;
Look out, bake shop, here we come!
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To see the rest of the contest entries, visit www.parade.com and click on "Ask Marilyn."

The 100-Word, One Syllable Paragraph Contest

Readers were asked to write a 100-word paragraph using words of only one syllable, but without repeating any words. More than 7000 readers submitted entries, and many noted that writing such a paragraph was way tougher than they had thought! The most popular subjects were dogs and cats and the beauty of nature. The most common disqualifying mistake was repeating words, but we weren't fussy when entries had just a couple of oopsies. We also didn't care about the length of the paragraph, as long as it was almost 100 words or more.

Read all the winning entries.
#1 Pam Capps of Celebration, Fla.
#2 Robert Leisure at the Roxbury Correctional Institution in Hagerstown, Md.
#3 Susan Sciacca of Haworth, N.J.
#4 Marlene Condron of Fort Wayne, Ind.
#5 (tie) Cliff Springs of Lexington, S.C.
#5 (tie) Cheryl Kayes of Raleigh, N.C.
#7 Laurie Mulert of King George, Va.
#8 Jane McKenzie of Taneytown, Md.
#9 Marcia Poland of Chesapeake Beach, Md.
Special Award for Really Awful Shakespeare
Consolation Award for a Bad Day at the Beach
And the Weirdest of Them All

Does any A2Ker recognize their entry?
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pieceofccake
 
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Reply Sun 10 Oct, 2004 04:28 pm
hmm
did this win? i liked it but they repeated words

I love carbs, but they don't like me;
Look at my thighs, so all can see---
A curse that comes from too much pie,
Snack cakes, sweet tea, ham on rye.

Go to gym four times per week,
Dance class twice, stay with beat,
Bend knees, side step, back once more,
Hang tough, fall down, hit the floor.

Jump rope, biker hard, swim ten laps,
Push up, pull back, walk real fast.
Lean, mean shape and abs of steel,
Less food in, needs good strong will.

Now, for you, this tale is done;
Look out, bake shop, here we come!
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BumbleBeeBoogie
 
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Reply Sun 10 Oct, 2004 11:28 pm
Pieceofcake
Pieceofcake, welcome to A2K; glad to have you here,

Good eye! Looks like you spotted the back word used twice. Amazing that Marilyn would not catch it.

BBB
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