Homemade Cartoons

@Ragman,

Ragman wrote:

This is just my need to tweak because I like your work. I would edit the last part of the last sentence thusly:"...I have 'til Monday to get off of her cloud."

This is funny ragman. I don't think it works without the word "content"

Just saying get off her cloud makes it sound like a Mick Jagger song, instead of the idea of cloud computing.

I think this was a pretty clever one in fact.

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@chai2,

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...I don't think it works without the word "content"

I feel the word "content" is key too. This was an older cartoon before the cloud became a buzz word (I originally used the word "Wikipedia" which is not very funny).

Thanks for the suggestion and feedback.

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http://i1306.photobucket.com/albums/s565/rcleary171/Cartoons/Cartoon151_zpsd3915db6.jpg

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I find figure drawing a challenge. Dogs and fish are much easier but will limit my market.

http://i1306.photobucket.com/albums/s565/rcleary171/Cartoons/Maid_zpsd9bbbb54.jpg

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@Ragman,

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The Birthday-Dead-fish one is way too long and misses the mark comedicly.
In general , with these cartoons, shorter and briefer is better in comedy.

Hi Ragman,

I can't argue with you that length can kill a joke. The challenge is getting enough information out to give the joke the context that it needs. I have not looked at this one for awhile. A re-write would be a good exercise.

Thanks for the feedback.

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