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How to improve this sentence? "Replaced over 30% of equivalent workload of supervisor daily..."

 
 
Reply Tue 30 Jul, 2013 04:29 am
Hi everyone, I was previously an intern with a securities firm, and am now trying to add this experience into my CV.

During my internship I did over 30% of my supervisor's work and so reduced more than 30% of her workload.

I wrote in my CV, "Replaced over 30% of equivalent workload of supervisor daily in brokerage activities",

but I just feel that it doesn't sound right. How should I change it? (grammatically and in terms of style)

Thanks!!

Jacky
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dalehileman
 
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Reply Tue 30 Jul, 2013 11:56 am
@ss11311086,
During my internship I not only completed all my own assignments but successfully undertook about one-third of my immediate supervisor's work
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cicerone imposter
 
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Reply Tue 30 Jul, 2013 03:37 pm
@ss11311086,
How did you arrive at 30% of your supervisor's workload?
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