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Reply Mon 18 Feb, 2013 06:59 am
Hi English Teachers,
Is my paragraph acceptable? Thanks a lot in advance.
I took a wrong bus. Fortuitously, I reached a supermarket and bumped into a friend taking a wrong bus as well.
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Ceili
 
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Reply Mon 18 Feb, 2013 08:18 am
@Loh Jane,
I would have written..
I took the wrong bus. Happily, when I reached the supermarket I bumped into a friend who had taken the wrong bus as well.
or
I took the wrong bus. Luckily, I bumped into a friend at the supermarket who had taken a wrong bus too.
or
I took the wrong bus. Fortuitously, when I reached the supermarket, I bumped into a friend who had done the same thing as me.
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dalehileman
 
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Reply Mon 18 Feb, 2013 03:06 pm
@Loh Jane,
…a friend having taken the….
Loh Jane
 
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Reply Wed 20 Feb, 2013 05:51 am
@dalehileman,
Hi dalehileman,
is this unacceptable?
'a friend taking a wrong bus as well. '
dalehileman
 
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Reply Wed 20 Feb, 2013 12:32 pm
@Loh Jane,
Quote:
is this unacceptable?
'a friend taking a wrong bus as well. '
I'm no grammarian. I think it's okay but maybe not colloquial
Loh Jane
 
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Reply Thu 21 Feb, 2013 05:08 am
@dalehileman,
Thank you
dalehileman
 
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Reply Thu 21 Feb, 2013 12:19 pm
@Loh Jane,
Quote:
Thank you
Not at all Jane. However don't rely on my observation since the meaning "colloquial" varies depending on who's using it
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JTT
 
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Reply Thu 21 Feb, 2013 12:56 pm
@Loh Jane,
Quote:
I took a wrong bus. Fortuitously, I reached a supermarket and bumped into a friend taking a wrong bus as well.


I took the [1] wrong bus. Fortuitously, I reached a supermarket and bumped into a friend taking [2] the [1] wrong bus as well.

[1] The bus you and a friend [one of many friends, not the only friend] took was not one of many buses, Jane. It was a specific bus to each of you in your own personal situation, the wrong bus, hence the 'the', which denotes specific.

'fortuitously' is out of place in such casual speech. There are many other choices much more suited to the register you are using.

As luck would have it/Coincidentally, I stopped at a ... .

[2]
taking - As you would both have had to have gotten off the bus to meet and discuss the situation, 'taking' is not appropriate.


and bumped into a friend who had taken the wrong bus

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dalehileman
 
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Reply Thu 21 Feb, 2013 01:09 pm
@Loh Jane,
Quote:
a friend who had taken the wrong bus
JTT as an oldster I'm a bit confused here but wouldn't he say "..also taken…."?

Quote:
It was a specific bus to each of you in your own personal situation, the wrong bus, hence the 'the', which denotes specific.
But using "the" suggests, if only ever-so-slightly--that they might have taken the same bus at the same time
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