@MrIVI,
Quote:Oh, possibly I explained that badly.
So, let me understand this; you explained it badly here but you're the scriptwriter. If you can't explain it easily, then how do you expect readers or viewers to follow it?
Why not find a more marketable script direction? It might just be me, but I think if I wanted success with a script, I'd find the path of least resistance - not greater.
You know what people do if a movie plot is as convoluted as this one? They walk out or toss the book away. That's assuming that a director and/or producer or potential publisher hasn't torn up the script or rejected it.
As a forum, we tend to give our unvarnished opinions. Deal with it.
Don't give up your day job.