All good English?

It's clumsy, and "good English" is not necessary a label which can be put on poetry, even when it does work. Here, it doesn't work. For example: Out of years of elucubration, comes divinely inspired.--oh yeah? Divinely inspired what?

Change "divinely inspired" to "divine inspiration".

'clumsy' is an excuse that teachers who don't know how to explain the language often resort to.



It's not such a mental hardship to see all manner of ellipsis in this,

"... comes the divinely inspired

If poets, songwriters, writers and other manner of artist had to explain carefully their every use of language, there'd be no positions for university professors.

elucubration, that was a new one on me.

O God, none worked well?

How to improve "a heavy reader,a graceful writer"?

It wasn't bad at all, Ori. Don't listen to Setanta. Even if he had an octagonal bed there wouldn't be a good side for him to crawl out of each day.

Note that my suggestion (above) has a possible stylistic advantage of repetition of the "-ation" ending, perhaps giving the sentence the phonetic form of a homespun cliche'.

From a similar stylistic perspective, I don't think you should alter

since heavy/graceful is a good semantivc contrast.

geez i dunno mate it's a bit stilted and smacks of over trumping on the big words k


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