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short story for correction

 
 
Reply Sat 24 Jan, 2009 02:02 pm
Hi everybody

Could you please help me by correcting this short story. Many thanks for your guidance.


Jim and Tim were at the library. They were each reading a storybook. Jim was engrossed in reading the storybook. Tim found the storybook boring. He was so disappointed that, on the spur of the moment, he ripped one of the pages of the book.

A girl saw what he did and went to inform the librarian, who went to where Tim was sitting and confronted him. He was lost for words. “Come to the counter with me,” she demanded. At the counter, she scolded him and asked him for his home telephone number as she wanted to inform his parents about his misdeed. He refused to comply at first. The librarian then threatened to report him to the police. On hearing that, he was frightened and told her the telephone number. She spoke to his mother, who apologised to her for what her son had done. She promised to pay for the book and told her that she would punish her son when he came home. Tim’s mother also scolded him on the phone and told him to tell the librarian that he was sorry for his stupid act. Tim complied by telling the librarian that he regretted his action.

Since that incident, Tim has never gone to that library. He is ashamed to be seen by the librarian again

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Reply Sat 24 Jan, 2009 03:19 pm
Jim and Tim were at the library. They were each reading a storybook. Jim was engrossed in the story, but Tim found his book boring. He was so disappointed that, on the spur of the moment, he ripped one of the pages of the book.

A girl saw what he did and went to tell the librarian, who went to Tim and confronted him. He was at a loss for words. “Come to the counter with me,” she demanded. At the counter, she scolded him and asked him for his phone number, as she wanted to inform his parents about his misdeed. He refused to tell her at first. The librarian then threatened to report him to the police. That frightened him, and so he told her his number. She spoke to his mother, who apologised to her for what her son had done. She promised to pay for the book and told her that she would punish her son when he came home. Tim’s mother also scolded him on the phone and told him to tell the librarian that he was sorry for his stupid act. Tim told the librarian that he regretted his action.

Since that incident, Tim has never gone to that library. He is ashamed to be seen by the librarian again


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