short story for correction

Reply Sat 20 Dec, 2008 10:29 pm
Hi fellow members

Could any member/s go through this short story and point out any errors and how I can improve the story.

Many thanks in advance.

One day, the wind said to the clouds, “I’m stronger than you. I can puff the trees and the houses down.”

The clouds retorted, “We’re stronger than you. Without us, the earth will be dry.”

“OK,” said the wind. “Let’s see who will destroy more parts of the earth.”

“I accept the challenge,” said the clouds.

The wind huffed and puffed and destroyed many parts of the earth. In the meantime, the clouds were nowhere in sight. The earth slowly dried up.

The battle between the clouds and the wind came to an end. There was no winner because the whole earth was ruined. The loser was the earth.
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