i WOULD LIKE SOME ASSITANCE/FEEDBACK

I don't know if you have read any of my writings, nontheless i would like some feedback. Good, Bad, Terrible, Get outta dodge
I am only asking because most of my frinds are split down the fence on this subject. Some love it and some say it's written by a child...... Well maybe half true i am young at heart. I know some of it is a little wacko but if you could any feedback would be fantastic... and a title you are referring to. Thank you...