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Fri 22 Aug, 2003 03:36 am
Let me taste your nectar
your sweet enriching nectar
i'll syphon your innocence
and steal your happiness
you knew i wasnt worth it
don't pretend i didn't warn you
i'm feeling empty
with no access but envy
if you let me in
i'll certainly binge
in you, in you
drain your fuel
soon you'll see
i had no choice
this is what it's like to be me
but don't say it was worth the leap
don't act surprised
you foresaw our demise
If I stumble across your path
in a distant time from here
don't you dare stand and stare
with hating eyes and a royal glare
you knew my status
i made it all but clear
but you can take solace in knowing
that i squandered your nectar
for a damp cold cellar
of self destructive behavior
and if you show me the sun again
i'll just sit and grin
you knew i wasn't worth it
don't pretend i didn't warn you
I don't really think of this as poetry.....i just write to write. also i play guitar and sometimes write returning lines kind of like a chorus i guess.....whatever, just tell me what you think. thanks.
Do you ever wonder why I smile from denial
Have you ever envisioned why I crawl away from inhibitions
Could you even know what lies behind the truth thats told
Well I may not know what it's like to grow old
But my heart was stolen from a dead man's soul
From this malefaction
I was bought and sold
I'm a bastard child
With an illegitimate smile
Trying to stake claim
In a dead man's game
figured i'd put this one up to....sorry to post two in a row but i'm goign through another insomniac phase here....
Oblivion, both of your poems are fantastic. ....I especially like the last four lines of the "....smile from denial.." poem. Did you write these for guitar? Were they meant to be sung.
A warm welcome to A2K.
Welcome to A2K! The first one has some interesting cadences, and I really like the first stanza. It starts off a bit vampiristic, but ends with what I see as a class struggle....the poor boy trying to woo the rich but troubled female. I agree with Letty, the last stanza of the second poem is fantastic. I also like "crawl away from inhibitions" with it's double meaning: "I'm honest, you are not." Nice work!
Hot sh*t, that's a unique way of saying "i told you so". Good sh*t. Good sh*t.
Hi, True Experience, and welcome to A2K. I must admit your critique was unique.
Thanks for the replies guys. Made my day
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No, i havent put these to music.