A Life

Croak is funny for death, like a magic lilly. It all was pretty good, but the last line made no sense to me. Are you having brain surgery?

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I like Philosophy.

I'm a mildly psychotic, neurotic, manic depressive, existential nihilist. If you talk to me, I will most likey alienate you. Fair warning.


Thanks for the warning....you were true to your word.

DUDE!

"Am I human? Do I not bleed?"

The last line seemed stranded to me also,
until I realized it may refer to "I" rather than to "hairline".
Sooner or later we bleed everything, no?

Poignant poem jjorge, thank you for sharing it.
You do indeed seem free, in the finest sense of the word.


NNY -- A magic lilly is a wonderful picture. Thank you for "fair warning" that you like philosophy. I'll have to be ... very ... careful. :-)

Codeborg

I originally posted the first stanza (lines 1-4) as a separate poem entitled:
" 'Little Note' (to E.D.)"

It was both a reflection on an undistinguished life, and sort of homage to Emily Dickinson, with an allusion to one of her better known poems.*

As I think of it now, I should have left well enough alone and not appended the second stanza.




* Here's the Emily Dickinson poem:

#288

I'm Nobody! Who are you?
Are you?-Nobody?-Too?
Then there's a pair of us!
Don't tell! they'd advertise?-you know!

How dreary?-to be?-Somebody!
How public?-like a Frog?-
To tell one's name?-the livelong June?-
To an admiring Bog
- Emily Dickinson

Hi, jjorge. I'm nobody. Are you nobody too?

Yes Edgar, there's a pair of us!



...How dreary?-to be?-Somebody!

I think with the second stanza, take out the "...and bleed" and it works very nicely indeed

LOL, jj. there is a trio of us. I got the reference, by the way.,

Cav,

Thanks for the input. I guess I need to ruminate over all this for awhile.

(hmmm...I must be more of a ruminant than an amphibian)