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Prolouge
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It was happening. Now. Tantulus grinned, relishing the moment. In just a few more seconds, he, Tantalus, would be ruler of all of Hades- the Shadeland.

Baring his sharp teeth in a morbid grin, Tantalus stabbed the god Hades, creator of Shadeland. Hades grimaced in pain as the sword entered his body.

"I can't be dying," Hades thought aloud "I'm immortal..."

At this, Tantalus had to chuckle, soon howling in mirth. "No, no, my soon to be former enslaver. This blade I just stabbed you with? It was laced with poison straight from Tartarus. Even so called immortals cannot survive that.

As the reality hit, Hades' spasms grew a hundred times worse. His life-light growing dim, Hades managed to send one last message to his faithful wife and companion, Persephone. It was an ageless prophecy, from the time of Uranus and Gaia. The prophecy read:

As the first immortal dies
There goes one of Kat's nine lives
Four children, one timelessly wise

As the moon has reached its bane
Strive no more in vain again
No longer will she be so plain

A queen she is, none the less
Her companion wears a scarlett vest
friends they are, best of best

Together in a string quartet are four faces
Doesn't matter what their race
Violin, viola,cello, bass

Always together, these four friends
Will help the Shadeland make ammends
Together 'till the very end

At the end of the prophecy, Hades wrote:

I am the first. Our love will always be timeless and ageless. Love- Hades

Sending his message via shadow, Hades was content to die- forever is a very long time. Taking one last wavering breath, Hades the Shade King died, becoming part of his former domain.

Tantalus smiled again. It was a smile reeking of evil, of victory, of a bratwurst-flavored breath mint.