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Jamezun
 
Reply Sat 19 Jul, 2003 08:52 am
My loved dear
I am just right here
And you are near
But I am fear
You disappear
Dropping my tears
Can you hear
Waiting you appear
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jackie
 
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Reply Sun 20 Jul, 2003 02:46 pm
"Twill be a grand and sweeter time
Should you find the object of your rhyme."

Good luck jamezun
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NNY
 
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Reply Mon 21 Jul, 2003 11:55 pm
You took out alot to try to get the syllables similar. You made sure it rhymed. Yet you forgot to first write a poem.

dog dop doop
sop sup soup
deep dob loop
i use scoop

So all in all, I loved it!
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