j67
 
Reply Sun 22 Apr, 2007 02:35 pm
Love
Its the reaper of light
It changes day into night

When your alone
Laying in your bed
Thought brewing in your head

And then theres love
Its the thing that stops your heart
Then makes it restart

When your walking down the street
And you see a pretty face
Full of ellogence and grace

A stroke of luck
A peaceful dove
A gift from above

Whatever you call
A perpetuos bliss, to a snug fitting glove
It will forever remain love
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Reply Mon 23 Apr, 2007 08:32 pm
You said you wanted comments. Did you want to know about misspelled
words and gramatical errors? I do see some in your poem. I don't have an English degree though.
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