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Poor Jack!

 
 
pswfps
 
Reply Thu 22 Mar, 2007 02:36 pm
There was a young man call Jack
Who always laid low in the pack.
When he proclaimed his uniqueness,
They all saw it as weakness,
And thoughtfully gave him the sack!
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contrex
 
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Reply Fri 23 Mar, 2007 07:24 am
shouldn't that be "called Jack"?
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aRtIsTgUrL
 
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Reply Fri 23 Mar, 2007 07:51 pm
Sounds great. A little lack of flow in the 3rd line but sounded cool.
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pswfps
 
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Reply Sun 25 Mar, 2007 12:06 pm
Thanks! I'll attribute the lack of flow to mild intoxication.

contrex - yes it should have been "called" - see above excuse.

Very Happy
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