my own poetry

At last! I have finally convinced my self to post my "one of my masterpiece" poem. I have been fighting my pessimistic side for about three weeks and lastly the other side overcame it. So, everyone, especially the girls (owws) who feel they are the one mentioned in this poem, read very carefully.
.................Hey, i would like to have your critics about my obra maestra!
.............Warning: If somebody decided to copy my poem, it's okay. But you don't want an 11-year old cry becoz of just imitating his magnum opus......okay!!!!!!!!
..................Only God knows if you do that (he watches over us everytime)
..............Thank you!!!!!!! :wink:

My Deja Vu Girl

I cannot fall short to remember
The every details of her gorgeous face
Her sweet smile when we're in each other
And the tone of her undemanding grace

The way she move her hair so natty
While elegantly dancing with music
I couldn't help to stop slothfully
And spend all my time watching her in meek

I don't want to make her turn to me
Till we end in nice talking and laughing
I want her to distinguish, to see
That i'm here for her who justly loving

And if surely destiny prefers
that i and her will be mutually one
Then i will take this (never better)
Like a valiant heart true man that's not wan.