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Cyracuz
 
Reply Tue 9 Jan, 2007 06:36 am
A little shack abandoned on a field


(Now rhyme away should you feel so inclined. Take it wherever you want. One line per post. Pay no heed to the rythm if you want to, just make sure it rhymes. To change the rhyming word, use a synonym.)
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aidan
 
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Reply Tue 9 Jan, 2007 07:11 am
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A little shack abandoned on a field

Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
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Endymion
 
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Reply Wed 10 Jan, 2007 09:28 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
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aidan
 
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Reply Thu 11 Jan, 2007 01:32 pm
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.
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Shapeless
 
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Reply Thu 11 Jan, 2007 01:35 pm
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam
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Cyracuz
 
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Reply Thu 11 Jan, 2007 01:38 pm
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
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Shapeless
 
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Reply Fri 12 Jan, 2007 12:06 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.




(Sorry, I know I added more than one line. I felt obliged to help us out of the rhyme corner I painted us into with "swam.")
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Cyracuz
 
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Reply Fri 12 Jan, 2007 05:16 am
(One line, two, three. It's not that important. Good lines you added too.)


A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.

And by the shores in deepst thought I stand
And see myself reflected in the skies
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Bohne
 
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Reply Fri 12 Jan, 2007 05:23 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.

And by the shores in deepst thought I stand
And see myself reflected in the skies
I wonder idly where the future lies
My Soul is yearning for the comfort of your hand
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Cyracuz
 
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Reply Fri 12 Jan, 2007 05:29 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.

And by the shores in deepst thought I stand
And see myself reflected in the skies
I wonder idly where the future lies
My Soul is yearning for the comfort of your hand

My skin remembers your faintest touch
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Bohne
 
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Reply Fri 12 Jan, 2007 07:20 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.

And by the shores in deepst thought I stand
And see myself reflected in the skies
I wonder idly where the future lies
My Soul is yearning for the comfort of your hand

My skin remembers your faintest touch
Where have the times gone, when you were mine?
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Cyracuz
 
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Reply Fri 12 Jan, 2007 07:29 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.

And by the shores in deepst thought I stand
And see myself reflected in the skies
I wonder idly where the future lies
My Soul is yearning for the comfort of your hand

My skin remembers your faintest touch
Where have the times gone, when you were mine?
This I know, though I don't know much
Never brighter than toghether we did shine
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Shapeless
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 12:21 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.

And by the shores in deepst thought I stand
And see myself reflected in the skies
I wonder idly where the future lies
My Soul is yearning for the comfort of your hand

My skin remembers your faintest touch
Where have the times gone, when you were mine?
This I know, though I don't know much
Never brighter than toghether we did shine

Yesterday, as I came upon the sight
Of these places that, of late, I had forgotten
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Cyracuz
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 12:25 am
A little shack abandoned on a field
Tin roof rusted, floor boards busted, door ajar...
Stood lonely under moonlight on the hill
and gathered light like silvered waters from the stars.

The lake where once, in summer days, we swam--
At night time this mysterious moonlit pool
reflecting on its face the Twins, the Ram,
the constellations in their nightly duel.

And by the shores in deepst thought I stand
And see myself reflected in the skies
I wonder idly where the future lies
My Soul is yearning for the comfort of your hand

My skin remembers your faintest touch
Where have the times gone, when you were mine?
This I know, though I don't know much
Never brighter than toghether we did shine

Yesterday, as I came upon the sight
Of these places that, of late, I had forgotten
It occured to me that I might
Live here, but the shack was too rotten


(in anticipation of a continued enterprise it might be advisable to not copy all of the verses every time, since the posts may become too long for practicality Smile just a thought )
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aidan
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 01:12 am
But hearts do not reside in wood and stone.
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Shapeless
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 01:41 am
But hearts do not reside in wood and stone
Nor memories pass with age and dust



(Agreed re: cutting and pasting, though it would be nice to see the poem in its entirety every so often. In any event, it might be easier to paste at least the lines in the current stanza... it makes it easier to keep up the rhyme scheme, though of course anyone is free to break up the rhyming.)
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aidan
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 01:56 am
But hearts do not reside in wood and stone
Nor memories pass with age and dust
So when night's shadows you must face alone
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Endymion
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 07:15 am
But hearts do not reside in wood and stone
Nor memories pass with age and dust
So when night's shadows you must face alone
Remember faith and so, remember us
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Cyracuz
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 07:31 am
But hearts do not reside in wood and stone
Nor memories pass with age and dust
So when night's shadows you must face alone
Remember faith and so, remember us

And thus may darkness seem a little less
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Bohne
 
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Reply Sat 13 Jan, 2007 03:49 pm
But hearts do not reside in wood and stone
Nor memories pass with age and dust
So when night's shadows you must face alone
Remember faith and so, remember us

And thus may darkness seem a little less
And hope for morning, new, and bright, and clean
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