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Writers' Workshop #4 - Avoiding Exposition through Dialogue

 
 
jespah
 
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Reply Mon 8 Feb, 2016 07:41 am
@edgarblythe,
The others are here: http://able2know.org/forum/workshop/
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jack belck
 
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Reply Wed 1 Feb, 2017 08:23 pm
What did you order?

Short ice teas, one with lemon, the other, a regular red cherry.

We stay sober while everyone else gets smashed?

Two of them fled before puking. That’s how we got the last table.

Very nice, Frederick, but anyone going to the john has to pass us.

At least they won’t stop to talk.

Well, you obviously need to talk.

Sis-

I wish you’d stop calling me that.

If you’ll start calling me Fred

like everybody else does.

We—we have our reason not to, don’t we?

Ten years, same old reason.

I moved to Chicago for that reason.

Has it worked out?

The job? Yes. I have so many contacts now

I could freelance and…

Read this. I got it this morning because it’s been a year since

Dad followed mom, so now both are gone.


Oh, from Dad’s old lawyer, but…

Keep on reading.

“I was on duty the night Mom was in the delivery room…

Charlotte Higgins…rushed from the state prison…

Died, infant survived…Mom, only she survived.”

Oh, my God! They switched babies!

We’re not brother and sister genetically.

Fred, dear Fred…That means one last round trip to Chicago.

Thank God. The wear and tear of these visits must have

been as hard on you as it was for me.

We have lots of forgetting and catching up to do.


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Umm, the sheets are bloody. You never…

No.

Damn! It’s wonderful to be able to say

what’s been bottled up for so long.

I love you, Ann.

I wished so many times you’d say that, but…

No buts any more.

They shielded me from the truth because my real mother was a murderer?

Yes. Come closer. I don’t think you’ve inherited anything dangerous.

No? How about…this?

Ann, Ann…

Fred, Fred…

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jespah
 
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Reply Wed 1 Feb, 2017 08:42 pm
W00t I had forgotten all about these. Nice job!
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