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DEAD AS A DOORNAIL

 
 
George
 
Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 08:34 pm
DEAD AS A DOORNAIL

Jacob Marley came to visit in the evening
Looking better than before though just as dead
No chains of ledger, money box, and till
Were bound about him and I wondered
No need he said for that, they're all online
Then now you're free! at that he howled
A howl comprising Pain and Loss and Woe
He opened wide his ghostly cloak and showed me
Blackberries, cell phones debit and credit cards
These he said these are now my shackles
These the ties that bind my soul to Hell
I looked beyond in search of further spectres
Of present past and Christmas yet to come
But reading my eyes regard he softly murmured
Nah no more these days I work alone
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Setanta
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 08:36 pm
First class work, George.
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George
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 08:43 pm
Thank you, kind sir.
It was fun to do.
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ossobuco
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 08:46 pm
Excellent! It was fun to read as well.
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edgarblythe
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 08:51 pm
Ye done yerself proud, boy. Good reading.
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Lord Ellpus
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 09:38 pm
Brilliant, George.
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gustavratzenhofer
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 09:41 pm
I liked it.
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Green Witch
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 09:49 pm
That's great George, can I send it to a couple of friends?
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Endymion
 
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Reply Wed 6 Dec, 2006 10:28 pm
Hello George

I enjoyed reading this
The way you ended it is spot on

Also your Mark Twain quote
(-nothing's changed it seems)


Endy
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George
 
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Reply Thu 7 Dec, 2006 07:54 am
Thanks, everyone.
I'm [sniff] overwehelmed.

Yes, Green Witch, I'd be honored.
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jjorge
 
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Reply Thu 7 Dec, 2006 08:13 pm
very good George!!
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