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Thu 2 Nov, 2006 01:39 pm
I found reason in your passion
My existence was not mere happenstance
I loved not out of sympathy;
Paths crossed and upon our eyes introductions,
My souls took flight as Cupid?s bow strung taut
And from his quiver flew sweet intoxicating nectar.
My world stood on end, and drifting
As only a fool can drown his own folly.
I pondered your presence.
I bear your mark, all over my skin
Lip shaped scars, which tingle when touched;
Nearer you stray my senses consumed by countless flames fueled by memory.
Burn me again with your lust laden love
I crave it daily though it destroys me;
You bid me to need you more than breath
And cherish you more than sight.
Now I am blind , eyes plucked from their unsuspecting sockets
Whilst my body joined with yours, keep my vision, only give me your love?
It is all which keeps us together.
Leave me your Lust, so you?ll never use it on another,
Strike me across my face as I seek to brush my lips near yours .
In this darkness, show me your light
I would not share another with you
Couldn?t give voice to the mares which roam my nights
The heart of midnight is not at all that dark,
Neither are all the brightest deeds done under the cover of light.
With your heated breath you trouble my waters
And inside me stirs? seeing ?? no sensing
My arousal you push buttons to see
How far I am willing to let you go.
Fingers trace my heart seeking the seat of my affection
In the womb of my self I feel my kiss through me;
Then I am on your lips pressed on mine
Now, beyond and past.
I search your eyes for a sign? and then you whisper?
Anyone who said love is easy, never had to walk away
And know they had left their heart behind
It is transparent in pure form but outside influences can cross signals
Loss is love?s better half sometimes coupled with betrayal and disgust,
Hats off my enemy?s friend deception
Walking away always looks simpler than it is
Choosing what you take with you and what you abandon.
You pack with one eye open, its twin guarded from tears
As the life you had so carefully sewn tears itself apart.
Yes love is transparent but its not good when you cant see in the dark.
Songs take on a hitherto unseen morbid quality instead of celebration
Your soul is awake; stealing moments of restless peace from chaos
Eyes on your feet so you don?t stumble over grief.
The ocean, stealing my precious nostalgia ? my darkness.
Washes the soul of my shoes, and leaves me thirsty?
Drinking you faster then I can taste
You enjoy me when I?m not deep in thought
You have my heart and soul but it?s not enough
Your desire ?. My will.
I shall not surrender my uniqueness or my peculiar phrasing; which drew me to you
I tiptoed in, when you weren?t looking, and watched you become one with liquid.
Following tumbling droplets or indoor rain
Pasting your hair onto your back
Smiling at territory so very intimate and as I often recall
So very familiar, I watch myself scrubbed from your body
So thoroughly that your flesh shone reddish pink; but you called it a rose.
This dull light mocks the honey hued afterglow
Of our twilight together, absently I trace words love and loss
In the steam of the bathroom mirror, and sign it with a happy face.
I can?t compete myself
I can?t surpass my past self, the poet who hid behind Birth Control Glasses.
I lost them and I was thankful to rid myself of the remnants of what was a defining section of my life .
Some say I look better, others notice me more
But I?ve always been where I am
I?ve always been who I am.
There is nothing different about me
Perhaps when I removed the glasses
It was the world outside which began to see
Beyond my appearance.
I visit your flames often
For they?re in lay the origin of my passion,
I mimic your tendrils taunting dance
Melting in the heat of your tongues embrace.
As you roll over me covered with ash
Smoky gazes across a semi-crowded room
We steam up windows in the car;
I enjoy you in my life and in my heart .
let me know what u think
Susan - I don't quite understand all of it -what do you mean by birth control glasses? I'll have to read it again, but my initial and overall impression is that I really like it, a lot.
I like a lot of things about it- the more formal language at the beginning, as well as the imagery taken from nature, and description of what had passed between them. But, I especially liked the last line: I enjoy you in my life and in my heart".
What a great line, so simply stated and kind of a surprise or juxtaposition when placed after the passionate and sensual language in most of the rest of the poem.
I think it's really, really good. There might be a few places where the poem would benefit from more economical language and clearer imagery - but since I'm not totally sure what you're trying to communicate in some places, I can't begin to tell you what, if any changes I think you should make.
I'm glad you posted it. Welcome to A2K!
thank you aidan
about the birth control glasses ... it was a random image which made sense then and not now ... but comes from a sheltering deceiving image ...avoiding the natural process of things ....