Then this one; Temporary Refuge: It's awesome......and the concept is totally understood.
It's just....especially the first four lines -- when I read it -- the effect on me is trance-like
The Reality: Naima, it's touching and haunting...especially these lines:
Quote:You burn away the pictures
But the memory's in your head
You throw away all those letters
But countless times they've been read
But it's also somehow disturbing which technically is a good thinh.
Quote:You must escape from the customs that have captivated you
But how will you hide from yourself?
In the real world the rhythm's somewhat different
How could you have been lied to all these years?
_there's a time everyday
When you start to believe
Oh the love seems real too_
No one hears you scream at night
They don't see your eyes shut tight
The reasons don't change
Until the traditional music starts to break
But they can never hold you down
The rain always pours to the ground
And every risen hope
Must come shattering
Shattering down
Gone through that countless times, know what you mean.
That's all that I'll say...............
Grains of sand is tricky............it's nicley written, yeah but still tricky, what are you talking about?
Life's Too Short to be Unhappy -- probably one of your best written pieces, that 's the way I feel. Everything about it, the way it started and the way it came to an end -- the climax! And the scene you have captured. It just felt as if a hand gripped me from inside when I read the end -- it felt like the end. Most of the tims, writters fail to arouse that feelingin the readers but this one.........merely a philosopher's dream.........................Period.
Love,
Leena.
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