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the hangover

 
 
Reply Tue 17 Oct, 2006 09:44 pm
I peered at the clock, my head seared at the sight of a slice of light
Stabbing at my eyes, my stomach churned and turned I thought it died
Still I smiled, until a flash back of last night hit my minds eye,

vivid it was an image, me livid, swaying and ricocheting, saying god only knows
Thinking I was untouchable when I was exposed, the feeling is a memory now all I feel is shame, guilty of so many things, some have left my brain,

now I gotta retrace my steps, apologise to my neigbours for inexcusable behaviour for puking on their doorstep, waking them up at daft o clock, to songs I sang at karaoke, I said "your joking?" Embarrassed so till next week im off the beer,

I told my friends "bet you I could go all year", all seven days it slowly fades till all I want is weed and pills, a line of this a drop of that I could go back, at the drop of a hat, the invitation to party, too good to miss I gotta go out on the piss, talk **** to strangers and hope we never meet sober, see lines of white like im flying over dover,
Stay out all night, go home hungover,
Drunk

i just wrote this its like 4 in da mornin, i did it real quick,
would like some feed back plz Very Happy
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Hitman J
 
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Reply Tue 17 Oct, 2006 10:03 pm
Tight **** fya...yo where U been anywayz lotta been happenin since U disappered
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roger
 
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Reply Tue 17 Oct, 2006 10:06 pm
Daft o'clock a.m. Hey, I'm gonna steal that line.
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mcee fya
 
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Reply Thu 19 Oct, 2006 08:33 am
thx hit man i been really busy so i aint had much time to write i see the battles are finally startin again there been loads a bitchin on tha neva endin thing, gettin locked all tha time lol Very Happy

oh n thx for reading my piece roger u can nick the daft o' clock line too
i like spreading expressions its cool Cool
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sozobe
 
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Reply Thu 19 Oct, 2006 08:36 am
This is a great line too:

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Thinking I was untouchable when I was exposed
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mcee fya
 
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Reply Thu 19 Oct, 2006 12:14 pm
thx Very Happy
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