Sin or Tragedy......and other stories....

I'm going to add more stories about different topics as soon as I write them(obviously :wink: )

Any constructive feedback is welcome.

And I hope you tell me how you felt while reading this story; the successful invokation of emotions in the reader is a vital factor of a well written story.

With respect,
LEENA

The piece (or pieces) was very well written in my opinion and flowed very very well between the differnet time frames.

The emotion that I felt most evidently throughout it was anger at the girl not being treated fairly and although there was a large emphasise towards the end on lonliness this was not the greatest emotion that this brought up. This instread was anger at her parents and although you may have attemtped to invoke lonliness in the reader your obvious comtempt and lack of feeling towards the emotion in the story distilled this meaning anger overtook it.

Hope that was helpful.

Jakal

hmmm
okay lee
so this wasn't very bad at all...(it was great)
i personally believe it can actually make the reader get 'into' the story.. if u know what i mean.
keep it up...
ps i knew it!