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grey eyes (a poem)

 
 
Reply Sun 8 Jun, 2003 07:33 am
Slumped there across the room,
her eyes awash with grey,
shrouded in her sombre cloak,
seeking solitude in her stormy day,
her dreary gaze never faltered,
not once did she avert her stare,
blank eyes piercing straight through me,
as though I was at one with the air,
I pleaded with my breaking heart,
I begged for her to hear,
I placed one foot in front of the other,
and slowly I edged myself near

Two pairs of eyes locked together,
the fuel of his dispute,
I prayed some sound would leave her lips,
but her pledge was she shall stay mute,
with haste she stole her glance away
and grey her eyes did blur,
I craved for some company,
but I was left alone with her,
she would not grasp my reaching hand
nor allow me to help her to her feet,
I looked at her as she looked on through me,
and we both admitted defeat

Softly, softly I whispered her name,
intimidated by it's power,
I peered into her pale face,
Faded; like the days of a dying flower,
two fingers I placed beneath her chin,
and raised her face upwards,
met with only bleeding eyes,
I was lost for words,
my eyes danced across her face,
on two cracked lips they froze,
Brown; like the autumn leaves- I noted
not the red of the petal of the rose

Gone re the days when her eyes did shine,
and sparkle with delight,
eyes once filled with sunshine,
now are filled with night,
once moist and plump upon her face,
sat a pair of plush pink lips,
soft as silk between the fingers,
I used to lay a kiss,
her voice just like my love has dried,
no more shall she sing,
never again to be my queen,
for I've long not been her king

Slumped there across the room,
her eyes awash with grey,
embracing a life of lonliness,
and enticing it to stay,
her dreary gaze never faltered,
not once did she notice me,
leaving her behind, empty handed,
I had to let her free,I pieced my heart together,
I begged for her no more,
I placed one foot behind the other,
on Grey Eyes I closed the door

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edgarblythe
 
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Reply Sun 8 Jun, 2003 07:43 am
Disturbing, but real...
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rayray
 
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Reply Sun 8 Jun, 2003 04:17 pm
wow! this is a masterpiece. very deep, sad and true. there isn't one weak line in the entire poem. i'd have to say my fav'rite lines are:

"softly, softly i whispered her name,
intimidated by its power,
i peered into her pale face,
faded; like the days of a dying flower"

and

"gone are the days when her eyes did shine,
and sparkle with delight,
eyes once filled with sunshine,
now ar filled with nite"

your really good keep up the beautiful writting.
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pyko
 
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Reply Thu 12 Jun, 2003 08:32 pm
very sad poem, wonderfully written Very Happy
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Dickster
 
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Reply Sun 15 Jun, 2003 07:08 pm
I give props. Some people might call it pessimism but I'd consider words such as these more like acceptance and admittance.
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