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i waLk aLone

 
 
rayray
 
Reply Fri 6 Jun, 2003 03:46 pm
i walk alone at nite//
the sky is dark and covered with clouds//
i think about my life//
i'm thankful for the new luv i've found//
the world around me's dark//
i picture her and smile//
this girl has stole my heart//
she stays on my mind for awhile//
two cop cars pass me by//
screams of sirens stopping traffic//
i'm lost in the moment//
focused on her not whats happened//
everything is silent//
the world's dead to me//
entrapt in her beauty//
a perfect nite, if only she walked next to me//
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RavenEye
 
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Reply Fri 6 Jun, 2003 05:14 pm
Hi RayRay,

I like this!! Very descriptive and profound. Thanks for sharing this one!! Hope to read more from you!!

~Raven Eye
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rayray
 
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Reply Fri 6 Jun, 2003 07:42 pm
thanx for the positive feedback ravEn.I
its descriptive yeah and gets across the point well but kinda plain. i've always liked this one though.
later.
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