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Sun 1 Jun, 2003 10:04 pm
Captured
Captured in the moment of despair~
My dream has come to an end~
No more love to gain~
Just tears to drown in~
Feelings that I don't belong here~
Makes my heart skip a beat~
How could this be, the one I loved and truly cared for?
Has turned against me in what I believe is true~
Believing that I can reach the highest grounds~
no matter the overcome in the end~
trying out new styles any suggestions or anything in that order will be thankful thank you very much everyone.
As if it all came down to a single thought, a word, or a phrase that we could all hold on to.
Does that mean it was good or bad?
does that mean it was good or does that mean it was bad?
Its good. You could refine it a little, my comments are in the text below, nothing big. Thanks!
Captured in the moment of despair~
My dream has come to an end~
No more love to gain~
Just tears to drown in~
Feelings that I don't belong here~
Makes my heart skip a beat~
How could this be, the one I loved and truly cared for?
Has turned against me in what I believe is true~ ***(in what i believe is ture doesn't fit the rest of the rhythm here, maybe you could work your belief into another line?)
Believing that I can reach the highest grounds~
no matter the overcome in the end~***(outcome?)
thanks for the replys muchos
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