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Shadow of the Moon

 
 
Reply Sun 13 Aug, 2006 05:17 pm
Heavens gates don't open up here,
in this white dusty sunbaked place.
All to feel is the suns white heat,
it's profound beauty melts eyes.
Watch a horizon never seen before,
by daring human eyes I watch.
The darkness creeps along the dust,
consuming it in a cold grasp.
Then comes the chilling shadow,
it takes it's hold on the moon.
Becoming dark and blank,
as the sun disapears,
leaving a dry frozen landscape,
for none to see.
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Reply Thu 17 Aug, 2006 03:47 pm
Drkilljoy, welcome to A2K. The imagery in your poem is lovely, and the title is alluring, my young friend. I especially like the phrase, "...consuming it in a cold grasp...". I can feel that.

I would suggest that you edit for punctuation, but please continue to write.
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